N. M. Flores' THE END OF TIMES

I'm finally getting back to writing my low-budget single location zombie dramedy spec-script THE END OF TIMES.

The premise follows a gas station clerk and an amateur robber whom, in the span of a single night, decide whether to kill or save "Patient Zero" of a zombie virus who unexpectedly arrived. Meanwhile, the clerk and robber find themselves to open up to and bond, while the zombie attempts to retain his humanity.

Ideal casting choices would be Tom Holland as the clerk, Hunter Schafer as the robber, and Josh Duhamel as the zombie.

Pictured is poorly made concept art/storyboards of the first act

Until next time 🙂
- N. M. Flores

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  1. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Where is Hunter Schafer on this concept art?

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      The blond obviously. I didn't use photo references

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        what fricking blond

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          The one next to the Open 24 Hours sign on Concept Art #9

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          the one with makeup on and the ski mask.

          OP can you break down your storyboards for us? I'm a little confused on that last one. Is it the top of the clerk's head? Like that John Wick 4 shot? Or is it the zombie's big eyes you were talking about.

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            It's a rodent's eye. Not gonna say what kind tho haha

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          are you stupid?

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            Yes

  2. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Wow

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      I know right, it's my favorite spec script. It's my most personal so that's probably why

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        Have you written any dialogue?

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          Of definetely

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            Could you post some please

  3. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Destiny's Gas and Snacks
    Formerly Fate's

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      >Fate's Gates and Snates
      idgi

  4. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    how does a zombie retain his humanity

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      only eats a little bit of the brain of his victims, so that they don't die

  5. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    please explain how you explain them not leaving and not calling the police

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      The Clerk doesn't want to lose his job, and blackmails the robber to help him deal with it. His arc is about trying to get out of arrested development so it'll come to a satisfying ending with it

      The police can't get involved yet because they may not let the zombie live if they choose to help the zombie, AND they'll arrest the robber.

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        why would the clerk think that he'd be held accountable for being robbed or having a man with medical issues enter the store?

        also, how do they know he's a zombie and that's patient zero? there are schizophrenic drug addicts that enter 24/7 gas stations all the time and there'd be no way for these characters to know he's the first contagious zombie of his kind without prior information.

        ALSO!!!! the robber seems to be very bad at being a robber for some reason. why would they allow themselves to be blackmailed? couldn't they just leave? aren't they wearing a mask and holding a gun? at what point do they decide to give up everything they intended on doing that night for the sake of avoiding blackmail and helping some guy that may or may not be a zombie who hasn't turned yet?

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          1. He's an overthinker

          2. Druggies eyes don't lose pigmentation; blind people can. No, he's obviously not blind as he arrives by crashing his car

          3. She is bad at robbing because she's an amateur. He got her by surprise and took her gun.

          Have you considered that I thought of these plot holes before writing? Not to mention the rough draft isn't even done yet so it's bound to update

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            youre a shit writer and i hope the validation you got here was enough to satisfy you so that you never write another word of this story. please refrain from polluting humanity's already ailing culture with your horribly thought out dogshit fanfiction you thought of while staring out the window of your parent's car.

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            how the FRICK do you visually portray overthinking in a movie with three people without making your film moronicly hamfisted?

            you could have a mean boss character explain everything. boom. solved your dumb plothole. god im good at this.

            • 11 months ago
              Anonymous

              cinematic techniques. Ticking clock, freeze ups, zoom ins, indecision, display the fricking effect of the indecision. It's easy. Its a visual medium anon

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                Ah, of COURSE! All that spastic shitty camerawork explains why the character is letting this sick man die on the floor! 10/10 Kino

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            So a guy behaving like a drugged up homeless man enters the store and tries to bite them, but they know he's a zombie because his eyes don't have pigmentation? Why and how would they notice that and both conclude that not only is it a zombie virus, but he's the first and only one with it?

            • 11 months ago
              Anonymous

              It makes more sense in the script

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            also blind people crash their car all the time and people can get all sorts of side effects from drugs and street living.

            also who eats brains one bite at a time without killing their victims. you have no tension here and the story falls apart in five seconds.

            • 11 months ago
              Anonymous

              Blind people drive cars? I wasn't the one behind the brain eating idea btw

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            Your concept is decent but everything else is moronic. Make up believable answers.

            Like, how they know it's patient zero. On the news right as Holland and Robber are arguing over the robbery(comedic), it says a monkey has bitten a researcher at MEDICAL RESEARCH LAB, and the researcher escaped thinking he was going to be killed. Anchor says "monkey was infected with virus mimicking what you see in a zombie film" then the anchors make a flippant joke about the situation and move onto sports. You can also have the zombie in the store, comedically messing up the displays while this whole news scene happens. You don't have to crash the zombie into the store. It would make the cops come immediately.

            You could even open the movie on this monkey bite and escape, to make it clear to the audience. Action in the beginning to draw people in, then we meet our characters.

            I expect royalties by the way.

            • 11 months ago
              Anonymous

              Expanding. Make it clear Holland has delusions of grandeur. He's in a shitty job, but he believes he's something great. Make him pretend to be on a talk show, pretend to be president while stocking chips or counting the till, right before the robbery happens.

              Then it makes sense why he forces the robber to do this, why Holland thinks its his job to murder this guy who may or may not become a zombie. He will be a hero, he thinks.

              I don't think you have enough her for a 90 minute film though. What will they argue about? Maybe a cop comes and Holland covers for Robber? But that's only like 10 mins at most. The rest is Weekend at Bernies zombie laughs? Weak. The most kino idea I can think of, is that a customer comes in while the zombie has escaped their containment, says "Hey, you guys open?" and you cut to, both the customer and the zombie tied up with the customer having an obvious bite on their arm.

              None of this really justifies why they don't call the cops though.

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                they seriously need to call the cops. it will be such a glaring plothole unless they make the clerk a criminal in his own right.

                perhaps they can call the cops and the line will be busy throughout the duration of the movie. there could be a funny scene with the hold music contrasted by the antics of the horrible situation.

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                You could do the lazy thing and have it be a winter storm? Your idea is fine too, maybe call them, tell them and you make the zombie do something crazy so that Holland forgets about the call? But then they'd just wait, not try to kill the guy.

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                Expanding. Make it clear Holland has delusions of grandeur. He's in a shitty job, but he believes he's something great. Make him pretend to be on a talk show, pretend to be president while stocking chips or counting the till, right before the robbery happens.

                Then it makes sense why he forces the robber to do this, why Holland thinks its his job to murder this guy who may or may not become a zombie. He will be a hero, he thinks.

                I don't think you have enough her for a 90 minute film though. What will they argue about? Maybe a cop comes and Holland covers for Robber? But that's only like 10 mins at most. The rest is Weekend at Bernies zombie laughs? Weak. The most kino idea I can think of, is that a customer comes in while the zombie has escaped their containment, says "Hey, you guys open?" and you cut to, both the customer and the zombie tied up with the customer having an obvious bite on their arm.

                None of this really justifies why they don't call the cops though.

                Just make it so the robber is someone Holland has a crush on

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                Boom. Perfect. It's going in.

                Ok, how much funding do we need to get Ana de Armas in this thing?

                YES! Yes! Hunter Schaffer? You're fired! We're bringing in the Ana de Armas.

                I'm borrowing something (but not entirely) what Zack Snyder did for Dawn of the Dead. The zombies in that film start with only eye color changes that evolves to rotting skin and such.

                Hmmm. Sounds really bad. Let's not do that. Whatsoever.

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                So only Tarantino can borrow from stuff he likes? I'm a fan of Snyder, I wanted to pay homage to his zombie films

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                Tarantino, yeah? You're Quentin Tarantino now? Mr. Rough Draft Isn't Finished?

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                Yeah, all these questions and more will addressed and ideas are subject to change. Forgot to mention this takes place in the middle of the Nevada desert, and the Zombie is wearing a lab coat. I'll let you connect the dots.

                That's all I'll speak about the project today 🙂

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                we'll have the script done by tomorrow when you wake up. of course, we'll have to sort out the royalties, but we can do that later.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      Robber doesn't want anyone else showing up because he'll get arrested for attempted robbery, and if there's a dead body lying around he worries he'll get blames for that too, so he tries to resolve everything himself
      You can play up how he's inexperienced and a bit of a frick up, but since he's the one with the gun the clerk has to do what he says, and maybe set up some low tension with how the clerk will eventually get to a phone without getting caught

  6. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Ok. I kinda like it, good luck dude

  7. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    the robber has absolutely no reason to stay around trying to fix the situation. robbers tend to run when anything goes wrong. for all the robber knows, a man is having a medical emergency and the authorities will be on the way shortly.

    perhaps it would make more sense that another employee on the same shift is gearing up to rob the place and put the blame on the main character, then zombie shows up, loyalties are put to the test

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      The robber is being forced to help, and she's new at this (only one other previous robbery). She's not actually a bad guy. My intention was to follow 2 different depressed and hopeless people as others don't express the same

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        i see, two people who are bad at their roles, who would normally be pitted against each other, are being forced to handle an almost supernatural situation. i like it. its got legs.

  8. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    also the title doesn't make any sense. its the end of time, or its the end times. there is no such thing as the end of times.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      It's meant to be quirky, like The Pursuit of Happyness

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        you've sold me on it. write it and shop it around. you've got an idea here.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      The End of Times is a joke on Closing/Quitting time.

      The last shot of the movie is a closeup of Holland punching out.

  9. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Now this is the autism I came here for not the coomer or no gf threads

  10. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    so im guessing it starts with the robbery, which is interrupted by the zombie man, which leads to the main characters being trapped and forcing communication. however, does the robber not have a gun? or perhaps the gun is fake? why would a street smart individual be unprepared to pistol whip an intruder regardless of his unknown medical condition?

    is there some reason the main character isn't resentful towards the robber? how do they end up taking care of the zombie man's injuries without the robber taking every chance they get to bolt out the door back to their lifestyle away from the entire situation? what compels somebody willing to harm others for their goods to engage in a debate instead of doing what they want?

    this idea is full of holes and is probably supplemented with whatever music you listen to while you write. that musical feeling youre inspired by will not translate to the screen unless you work a lot of the kinks out of your idea. make these characters act human and the script will fall into place.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      Not the anon that you're responding to but I say change the premise to be they're 2 acquaintances meeting up to do an inside job and rip off the store when the zombie pulls up.

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        Then you might as well change the entire premise. They're ripping off a research facility for drugs. The scientist is there alone, they watch him get bitten while waiting for him to leave. They see a recording/audio tape/note that basically says he is patient zero, this is a zombie virus, etc.

        Then you maybe have more interesting scenes where they try to cure him, kino monkey hijinks.

        The initial premise of a gas station clerk, robber, zombie is better though.

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          you can have two people be involved in a store robbery without it being high stakes.

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            One of the robbers is dying of Cancer, the other is a Sagittarius. Medium stakes to satisfy both high and low stake audience members.

            • 11 months ago
              Anonymous

              frick yes

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          Monkey fights are always kino, the research lab could be the better setting after all.

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            Then the robbers need to kill every animal and basically burn the place down.

  11. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    im sober and i hate writing

  12. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    also you cant draw and i hate you

  13. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    You can draw and I love you! Follow your dreams!!

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      you wouldn't watch this piece of shit in a million years even if it was free and you had the whole day wide open.

  14. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Tom Holland is a good choice. Make the robber black and based. Anthony Mackie

  15. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    "Retaining his humanity" implies he hasn't turned yet. If he's not a generic zombie by this point, what makes the character think he's a generic zombie? If they assume zombie right off the bat, it makes them look incredibly dumb.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      I'm borrowing something (but not entirely) what Zack Snyder did for Dawn of the Dead. The zombies in that film start with only eye color changes that evolves to rotting skin and such.

  16. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    >storyboards before finishing the rough draft

    hey! i've got a million unfinished stories too anon!

  17. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    I solved your "blackmail" problem. Holland has the security tapes. Says he'll delete them if the robber helps. In the end, Holland, despite not having any reason to do so, deletes the tapes.

    Still a lot of other problems.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      You guessed it correct! You get a gold star

  18. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Switch Schaefer and holland's role. Otherise this idea sounds so kino i almost wish you hadnt posted it on Cinemaphile. That sounds like a marketing deal-breaker for most studios kek

  19. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    This is gonna work. I want to see some damn SCREENPLAY action.

  20. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    this robber character is giving me a headache. very underdeveloped in terms of motivation and goals.

  21. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    why not have the zombie be an important person to one of the characters? he shouldn't be patient zero either, because you'd need some kind of governing body or health organization to confirm that. it should be an ongoing apocalypse. rumors here and there. then when shit hits the fan for these characters, they'd already have some idea of zombies planted in their heads, alongside the audience.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      frick im so smart. if the character is important to them, and they know people are putting out warnings and statements on how to handle the zombies, they'd actually have motivation to try and help.

      Im assuming you've never worked anywhere ever because nobody is putting up with this shit unless they have good real human reasons why they shouldn't clock out, drive home, and relax without any of this bullshit

  22. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    I've been in a writers room, and this is basically it. Quarter formed moron ideas, being honed into half-formed moron ideas, and the main moron already having shitty concrete ideas he won't budge on.

    And these were mostly decent people. I can't imagine how braindead moronic a modern SJW writers room is. The best thing you can do, OP, is scrap it and do it all over again. Just the premise. And then scrap it again. Eventually you'll have several great ideas you can work the script to fit around.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      i wrote the social network and west wing and yeah this thread is pitch perfect writers room schlock.

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        I wrote There Will be Blood, Boogie Nights and Punch Drunk Love. Daniel Day Lewis is a hilarious guy, just a great guy.

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          damn we write good stuff. great writers we both are.

  23. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Start of the 3rd act should be a second actually competent or vicious robber invading the store by chance due to liking the zombies car or something.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      zombie man has to bite the robber in self-defense while saving the main two characters. rendering the entire debate pointless as the vicious robber zombie sprints off into the night.

      could be based

  24. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    If they're able to tie him up and restrain him. It makes no sense for them not to call a higher authority and tell them what they know about Patient Zero. Even if they say "but you've seen zombie movies, they always try to research the virus, we need to kill him.", it means authorities will get the virus from the monkey.

  25. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    OP got mad we made fun of him. If he's going to make it in israelitelywood, he's going to need to get used to people annihilating his script.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      yeah i was trying to be nice to OP but he hit me with the "MY UNFINISHED ROUGH DRAFT DOESNT HAVE ANY PLOT HOLES!!!"

      so i said mean things to him and im sorry. it's a decent idea. needs some grounding and motivations to complete the dance.

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        He also said he would post dialogue and didn't.

        Then the robbers need to kill every animal and basically burn the place down.

        Easy fix, it's not a bite. Researcher is injecting the monkey with a virus, but the monkey jerks and he jabs himself.

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          Wait a second that's right... where the FRICK is the dialogue OP??

          We need a feel for their characterizations and the tone of their interactions in order to make more changes to your script.

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            Holland was a good pick. I can imagine his character pretty clearly. Hunter is a horrendous choice that puts into question OP's competency. Needs to be someone older, but still somewhat green and nebbish.

            For some reason, James Franco playing a similar character to Pineapple Express comes to mind.

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            I never actually agreed to post dialogue, I just said I had dialogue written. I don't show script pages of an unfinished script to just anyone.

  26. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    HEY OP YOU homosexual

    WHEN YOU GET BOUGHT OUT OF THE PREMISE FOR 75K TO SOME ACTUALLY COMPETENT PEOPLE

    I WANT MY ROYALTIES FOR AT THE END WHEN HOLLAND PUNCHES OUT AND THE TITLE CARD "THE END OF TIMES" COMES

  27. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Who’s making the logo

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      please somebody post a logo we need a logo the studios are barking up my ass over here

  28. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    >INT. DESTINY GAS STATION - NIGHT
    The Clerk is sitting there alone at the edge of the frame behind his counter. Another slow night. Store is neat, clean, and doused in fluorescent lighting.

    >CUTS TO EXT. UNKNOWN ROAD - NIGHT
    Headlights can be seen bouncing over potholes. The engine is roaring.

    >CUTS BACK TO INT. DESTINY'S - NIGHT
    The Clerk stares up from his phone, where he was very obviously zoning out to a picture of a cute girl. Something is outside the large glass windows of the shop.

    >CUT BACK TO EXT. UNKNOWN ROAD - NIGHT
    The now visible car is only picking up more and more speed as the camera reveals a broken windshield and a shadowy figure clutching the wheel. Something isn't right here.

    >CUTS TO WIDE SHOT OF INT. DESTINY'S GAS STATION
    A presumed male figure in a ski mask barges in with ferocious intent.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      you see, i am setting up the zombie car as a bait and switch for the robber's introduction. after some time spent with the robber, establishing their respective roles in the story, we can have the car slam into the gas station.

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        You need to start with the zombie bite, then cut to Holland. Robber should be a surprise. You need to set up Holland as kind of insane with delusions of grandeur. He wants to save humanity.

        Don't have a car slam into the station. Cops would be called. The zombie just wanders in while they are having a comedic robbery argument about how a robbery is supposed to go. Zombie wanders the aisles, knocking things over, characters are bewildered. While this is happening, news plays letting our characters know what the audience already knows about the bite. The reporters flippantly dismiss it, cut to sports.

        I'm even giving you jokes here. Heed me.

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          i was gonna have the zombie text his mom saying he got bit by a zombie and is turning into a zombie but instead he accidentally texts the clerk and the clerk now knows he's a zombie but the robber doesnt know so the clerk has to convince the robber with the text but the robber is street smart so they think its a lie yknow?

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            Convoluted. My idea is simple and elegant and funny and can be used in a trailer.

            • 11 months ago
              Anonymous

              yeah my bad i was trolling and lying

  29. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    so this is my storyboard for the destiny gas station

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      Flip it 180. Holland and register are on the right. Better cinematography. I am Roger Deakins btw.

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        oh shit... you're right... wtf....

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          it's so cozy in there. i wanna live in destiny's gas station with all my best friends. tom holland, hunter Schafer, and Josh Duhamel as the zombie

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          You generally have characters enter middle or stage left. The way your first image was presented, it went against that a bit. Already introduced characters generally stay on stage right.

          The movie is already basically a play, learn from them.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      how is this a storyboard

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        it's based. me, tom holland, hunter schaffer, and Josh Duhamel as the zombie will be hanging out in there watching kinos on the tv. id buy snacks and perhaps smoke cigarettes out back at the end of the night. its so cozy.

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          but doesn't a storyboard usually have multiple panels?

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            if OP would help us out here we could draft up some more panels but he's being stingy on the deets.

  30. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Anyone notice OP said this was his most personal script and that the main character is trying to progress past his arrested development?

    Kind of funny that the robber is a cute trans girl who wants to help him with this with no explanation as to why with a terribly underdeveloped personality. Wonder what all this means?

  31. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Right now we have no reason to give w shit about the first robber, why should we sympathise with them or want them to succeed, OP? How will you show that?

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      You grow to like the robber as he shows he means no harm, and is bad at this over the course of the robbery. You also make him sympathetic by him not wanting to kill zombie.

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        Unconvincing... you need specific actions that will happen within your first 20 pages, 30 max. Right now this character just sounds like a pathetic frick up. Is this a comedy?

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          It's obviously a comedy.

          P. S. Based on some of y'alls suggestions, I can guarantee you have no idea how I'm gonna execute this. I'mma keep it that way for now 😉

          There's a lot of good ideas here. If you're not prepared to kill your baby script so it can be reborn into something better, you aren't cut out for this.

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            If it's going to be a comedy then what are the major comedic moments? You can't just say it's going to be all dialogue, the premise alone isn't interesting enough for that.

            • 11 months ago
              Anonymous

              I am not convinced OP intended to write a comedy. The storyboards set a different tone.

            • 11 months ago
              Anonymous

              I am not convinced OP intended to write a comedy. The storyboards set a different tone.

              Yeah, I'm not OP. I'm better than OP. My posts here are trying to be a comedy, not a great, but a comedy. I wrote the news report premise.

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                Ah, the author of the famous news report premise.

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                More and better than anyone here has wrote. Read the thread before you post.

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                im the author of the famous being sober and hating writing

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        WAIT WHAT?? THE ROBBER MEANS NO HARM??? I assumed that the clerk would be the one to argue against discharging a firearm into the head of a potential schizo with medical conditions!! In his fricking store no less!! That he DOESN'T WANT TO GET FIRED FROM??? THAT WAS THE WHOLE POINT OF HIS CHARACTER WHAT THE FRICK!!!!

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          That's the dichotomy. Robber is nice. Holland is kind of insane and wants to save humanity. It's a good subversion.

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            robbers aren't nice though. it's an unearned subversion given the minimalist nature of the script. unless this is some kind of bumbling comedy, but then why base the runtime around a debate on the ethics of executing a zombie man. Sounds silly and hackish and amateurish. Could get way more juice out of just riding the force of your characters actions.

            If the robber is nice, why have him be a robber at all? That'll just slow the story down and potentially snag the audience on something that is immediately thrown out the window anyways. He could be a coworker, or a manager with a rank above out clerk character.

            • 11 months ago
              Anonymous

              OUR clerk character. It belongs to us now.

            • 11 months ago
              Anonymous

              I think you can have a robber character that is morally opposed to killing

              • 11 months ago
                Anonymous

                yeah i suppose since its a woman it'd make sense.

  32. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    I've worked in the business a long time, kid. And lemme tell you, you got "it"

  33. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    P. S. Based on some of y'alls suggestions, I can guarantee you have no idea how I'm gonna execute this. I'mma keep it that way for now 😉

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      I already sold a script based on this premise an hour ago because of this thread.

  34. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    >Hunter Schafer as the robber
    Troll thread.

  35. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Alternate title. ClerkZ

    Tagline: The Z is for Zombie.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous
  36. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    I don't like the idea of a zombie retaining it's humanity, it defeats the point. Why not just have it so they are transitioning into a zombie over the course of the movie.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      it's not great. i like your idea more. works better than the magical zombie stuff going on with retaining humanity and all that.

  37. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    i just realized how romanticized and brooding and moody these storyboards are. this is supposed to be a hard hitting drama. OP is this what you daydream about? Fricking trans robbers in the zombie apocalypse?

    Also please post something from your playlist that you want in the soundtrack. That would be based.

  38. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    What kinos would you watch on the tv at Destiny's Gas and Snacks? Keep in mind that tom holland, hunter schaffer, and Josh Duhamel as the zombie are going to be watching with you.

  39. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Ok, here are my notes from the studio - OP, we just have a couple of little changes that we think will play better with our key demos:

    The clerk and 1st robber characters are now meth heads at a seemingly abandoned gas station in the middle of the night, probably trying to buy something but killing time smoking meth off the side of the pumps in their shitty car.

    "Zombie" is now a federal agent that comes speeding in and hits their car in their black suburban - I also think they need to have a hard boiled woman partner with them. We need a conventional woman lead in here to bring in the midwesterners.

    The feds need to requisition some gas but because the store is locked and seemingly unattended (back in 5 mins sign up) hilarity and aggrevation ensue as they interact with the meth heads.

    It's edgier now, and will cash in on anti-fed sentiment if we make them unsympathetic buttholes that get fricked with by their circumstances - so now we have a much more defined antagonist duo to help move the plot along as well as the protagonist duo.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      New development. Your script was picked up, but with a few revisions.

      The two meth heads are now Jay and Silent Bob.
      Female Fed is Kevin Smith's daughter
      You have to add zombies back in

      Good luck.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      New development. Your script was picked up, but with a few revisions.

      The two meth heads are now Jay and Silent Bob.
      Female Fed is Kevin Smith's daughter
      You have to add zombies back in

      Good luck.

      This is based and factual. We need a complete overhaul. Of everything. Somebody get on the phone and tell Tom Holland he's fired. We need somebody girthier. More weight. Anyone have OP's mom's number? They'd be a perfect fit.

  40. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Can we get a story breakdown? What's confirmed here so far? Looks like we've got:

    >THE CLERK, played by Tom Holland
    He has delusions of grandeur about his position in life, despite working the night shift at a rural gas station in middle of nowhere Nevada. He is willing to resort to violence to keep those delusions intact.

    >THE ROBBER, played by Hunter Schaffer
    This is their second robbery. They apparently botched the first one, but for whatever reason is at it again on the night of The Clerk's shift. They aren't cut out for this line of work, and don't have the stomach for the violence that comes with it. Possibly trans. Is very nice.

    >ZOMBIE IN A LAB COAT, played by Josh Duhamel
    Is in the midst of a struggle for their humanity against an unknown zombie-like affliction. Barges into the robbery and requires immediate medical attention. Lab coat + being in Nevada = Area 51? Seems like OP is proud of some kind of twist. Perhaps its alien zombies.

    And that's all we have so far. Not much of a story yet. What can we do to fix this heaping pile of shit?

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      Apparently this is a comedy but so far we don't know where the humour is coming from?

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        Not a comedy. A dramedy. Emphasis on the drama

        • 11 months ago
          Anonymous

          A drama with zombies? I don't think it will be taken seriously.

          • 11 months ago
            Anonymous

            Dramedy. Yes, it's weird. Tbh I was following Bong Joon-ho's route where he doesn't focus on a single genre and does the fusions. Like Julia Ducornau's Titane is this weird body horror psychological drama thing, where it doesn't feel right to just say body horror or drama.Maybe I'm a bit too ambitious with this

            • 11 months ago
              Anonymous

              Don't listen to the haters. You have to roll with the punches here. You know what you want to make, now zero in on how it's done. These other filmmakers gave their crazy ideas balance and presented it to the masses to great applause. Why can't you do the same?

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      Holland is a good pick. Hunter is bad. We need someone else.

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        >

        Ok, how much funding do we need to get Ana de Armas in this thing?


        this guy has the right idea

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        I wrote the role specifically for Hunter. It would be a dream to get her to co-write with me, especially after she scribed her Euphoria special

  41. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Ok, how much funding do we need to get Ana de Armas in this thing?

  42. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Linkara's "Lightbringer" vibes

  43. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    The robber being female is moronic. I think James Franco is a good pick. I know you hate him, but he plays a bumbling criminal well.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      >female

  44. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Ok listen, focus groups absolutely LOVED the random wild card non human characters in Bullet Train - The snake and the waterbottle - so let's bring at least one chaotic wildcard into this to make things more interesting. Cocaine Bear did well so what if we have a coyote or perhaps a pronghorn antelope freaking out on meth? What could be funnier than seeing a rabid meth antelope smash the frick out of the feds SUV and try to smash its way in?

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      can we get the deez nuts guy as a coworker? he survives until the end?

  45. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Are we going to address the lack of diversity in these casting choices? I feel like I can guess what race OP is based on that alone.

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      Yeah, I'm hispanic

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      So far OP has been quite truculent and dismissive of the suggestions to add more women characters into the action. It doesn't bode well.

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        He's fired.

      • 11 months ago
        Anonymous

        Actually I'm writing it in a way where gender, sex, nor race defines the characters in any real way, so they can easily be rewritten to almost any. Only the age range can't be changed, trust me on this one

  46. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    >Zombodroid
    terrible name. the zombie is a robot? what the heck

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      Oh that's the automatic file names on my phone. Zombie robots are completely Snyder's department

  47. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    is this thread one Hispanic talking to himself or something

  48. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    >zombies

    dead genre

  49. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Kino thread las.
    OP what are your music choices so far?

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      Trent Reznor and Atticus Ross to score would be amazing.

      A couple songs I would love to put are "I Am The Walrus" by The Beatles, and "Do You Realize??" by The Flaming Lips

  50. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    Instead of working on what could have been a memorable indie movie you decided to gloat like a little b***h.

  51. 11 months ago
    Jkl

    Here is my draft so far:
    >An inexperienced thief goes to rob a store.
    >Things don't go as planned and he ends up fighting with the clerk.
    >While the thief and the clerk struggle, the door opens.
    >A man stumbles in
    >After a while, he faints
    >He's dying but still alive
    >Every now and then, he vomits a pink liquid on the floor.
    >In view of the strangeness of the situation, the two protagonists decide to call a truce.
    >While looking for clues to the man's identity, a special bulletin is shown on TV.
    >They learn about the man who broke into their store.
    >Of his mysterious "illness" and the big reward for bringing him back.
    >They realize that turning the guy in to the authorities could bring catastrophic consequences but at the same time the reward money wouldn't hurt.
    >The entire film is a dialogue-driven comedy, where the protagonists decide whether or not to turn the stranger over to the authorities.
    Sorry for the shitty English, BTW

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      hmm. when does the cool stuff happen? you've got maybe a solid 30 minutes. the first act sort of. what's next?

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      what do they decide? what is the impact of that decision? do they receive the reward money and do anything with it? do they kill him, dump the body, then call it a day? do they kill him and call the authorities? do they smoke ganja and eat chips and watch kino together while delaying the inevitable? answer the god damn questions you half-baked midwit son of a b***h i need to know what happens to these characters. tom holland, hunter schaffer, and josh dumahle as the zombie.

  52. 11 months ago
    Anonymous

    interesting

    • 11 months ago
      Anonymous

      NO IT IS NOT!!

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