Or /coc/ thread if that's what you look for in the catalog.
Wiki:
https://the-conservatory.fandom.com/wiki/The_/co/nservatory_Wiki
Past threads:
https://desuarchive.org/co/search/text/the-conservatory%20wiki/type/op/
Weekly?
Or /coc/ thread if that's what you look for in the catalog.
Wiki:
https://the-conservatory.fandom.com/wiki/The_/co/nservatory_Wiki
Past threads:
https://desuarchive.org/co/search/text/the-conservatory%20wiki/type/op/
>How does this work?
>It works like a community toy chest. In the /coc/ threads you are free to post whatever ideas/settings/characters you want, but you have to be OK with other people playing with them (tweaking them, putting them in stories, using them for things, etc.)
>There's no guarantee that what you post will catch on either.
>If the OC you are posting is YOURS for something you are personally doing, then it would go to the "How is your webcomic?" threads.
>If you just want feedback on an OC of yours, then it would go in the "donut steel" threads or drawthreads.
If the thread dies suddenly or you still want to discuss something when there's no thread:
https://boards.plusCinemaphile/coc/
Last time:
-The Dynamo League greentexts continue
-Crackdown lore
-Doodles
-New pics
-Progress on the Highway Robbery comic
-Tantrum VS Blue Blood revised into a full short story, now with more words than ever
-Percinnius anon continues work on his comic
-Other stuff I didn't mention
Thread's late because I had to be somewhere.
>Thread's late because I had to be somewhere.
Probably for the best. You avoided over an hour of spam.
So a typical day on Cinemaphile then?
How do you spam a writing thread?
Not the thread, the catalog. The Perigay was at it like crazy yesterday.
Why does he keep doing that?
Like what does he get for doing it?
Don't try to wrap your head around schizo's internal logic, it's a futile act.
>Crackdown takes alot of damaging intake, mentally and physically
>Wonders how far he could push his esotericness against a psionic user
>His output would probably swallow their psionic energy like nothing what with their negative corners of their mind getting plucked out
>Crackdown potentially made gain some twisted positivity from the absorption, granting him joy and a happier/stronger status.
I fear that day there will be a 100% immunity to collasping, unless he hates cucking.
Arthur can be motivated by spite just as well as by any positive emotions: the more punishment you hurl at him, the more he'll refuse to give up.
Not the healthiest mindset to have, but it can be useful since he can take this determination and use it as a proverbial glue that would keep his actual body from falling apart at the seams.
I apologize for all the delays, but at long last: Bullion #5.
PAGE 1
SPLASH PAGE: Audrey's apartment, mid-day. Bullion, still in costume, arms folded under her chest, stands watch over Billy, who is sprawled across her couch, sound asleep. Johnny Be-Good's guitar rests against the side of the couch.
NARR. (1): To review the events of the past few days:
NARR. (2): Our heroine tracked down her old friend/enemy, Rocker Billy, seeking his aid against a mysterious foe, only to discover that each night, a demon would possess his body and run amok!
NARR. (3): Unable to fight the demon herself without harming its host, Bullion and the magic talking fox, Olympian, convinced Billy to challenge the demon to a musical duel for permanent control of his body!
NARR. (4): Happily, Billy won not only the duel, but the eternal servitude of the demon, who he rechristened "Johnny Be-Good" to further bind its capacity for evil!
NARR. (5): He's spent the last sixteen hours sleeping all that off.
BULLION: All right, Billy! Time to rise and shine!
TITLE: Leading The Blind!
OK, give me a bit. I need to re-read the first version of the script then read through the edits before I can give any sort of feedback.
Might take me a little longer than I'd like to do since my eyes are tired.
Newman instinctively hates demons n' stuff. Which is weird considering everyone thinks he's the antichrist.
Although Hell/underworld has him as a candidate for the antichrist. How that plays out storywise is that he has no idea what they're planning. This a seperate story from the main plot with NTH.
>Conrad and Demona have a history in the board tan stuff, which is problematic because Newman lives at Conrad's home and keeps trying to kill her every time she visits Conrad.
>In one of the older threads, I mentioned Newman has a tendency to run into dangerous situations due to a lack of self-preservation. Yes and no. Although I won't try to make it canon if there's something deeper at play. He could really just not have any sense of self-preservation. But last thread I mentioned something about a self-sacrificial element and realized it literally ties in with how he handles a lot of situations.
>NTH and Newman are both hazardous people. Although NTH has a weakness against the supernatural and would not, in any way shape or form! run towards the unknown.
>Although NTH has a weakness against the supernatural and would not, in any way shape or form! run towards the unknown.
Oh yea, this happens unconsciously too. The prologue literally has him dreaming about running away from screams inside a church before waking up in a cold sweat.
Is Newman an alcoholic? Him running into hazardous situations could be explained by being drunk/in withdrawal.
>Is Newman an alcoholic?
He is.
Although he can hold his liquor well, he is probably the type who doesn't show when he's had too much to drink.
How Conrad could tell is by slapping him across the face and he doesn't feel anything, like all drunk people pass the point of no return.
Then Conrad just feeds him a prairie oyster in the morning.
PAGE 2
PANEL 1: Billy groggily sits up, running a hand through his messy hair. Bullion stands in front of the couch, standing in profile. From Billy's sitting position, her chest is about level with his eyeline.
BILLY (sleepy): Mm, jus' five more minutes...
BULLION (1): 'Fraid not. We've got a lot to go over!
BULLION (2): How are you feeling?
PANEL 2: Same angle as previous panel. Billy turns to look at Bullion and snaps wide awake in shock at the sight of her chest mere inches from his face, his eyes bulging and jaw dropping open.
BILLY (1): A lot better than I did last ni--
BILLY (shouting) (2): IIII-YI-YI!!
PANEL 3: Bullion whirls around and starts walking away from Billy with a cheeky smile on her face and an index finger raised. Billy remains seated where he was, still in shock. The angle is such that the guitar is in the shot.
BULLION (1): Ah, you're back to your old self! That's a good sign!
BULLION (2): Now grab your new demon friend and follow me! Like I said, we've got a lot to talk about!
BILLY: Uh-- Buh-- Uh--
JOHNNY (small grumbling speech balloon): Sure, NOW you're tongue-tied...
(cont.)
PANEL 4: The scene moves to a city park, where Bullion's motorcycle is parked, with Billy in the sidecar and the guitar beside him. Bullion and Olympian have already gotten off and are walking forwards, Bullion beckoning Billy to follow them. Olympian is carrying a picnic basket in his mouth. Billy is removing a blindfold from his eyes.
NARR.: Later, after Billy has been blindfolded to keep the location of Bullion's apartment a secret...
BULLION: This way, Billy! We'll have a nice picnic and get some proper food in you while we have our chat!
BILLY (thinking): Picnic? Chat? Ulp!
PANEL 5: Closeup on Billy's nervous expression. He's sweating a little.
BILLY (thinking): Be cool, Billy. Just be cool. This ain't no thing, this is just--
BULLION (O.S.): Billy?
(BILLY'S POUNDING HEARTBEAT SFX): THUMPA THUMPA THUMPA
PANEL 6: Angle from over Billy's shoulder as he snaps himself back to reality. He's now seated at a picnic table, with Bullion and Olympian seated on the opposite side. Johnny's guitar is "seated" next to him rather than placed on the ground, supported against the table. There's food from the now-open basket on the table: sandwiches, fruit, bottles of water, etc. Bullion is leaning across the table to pass Billy a bottle of water, her chest pressing against the table as she does so.
BULLION: You still look pretty out of it. Drink up and rehydrate yourself!
BILLY: Uh, r-right!
PAGE 3
PANEL 1: Billy is still shaking as he tilts his head back and drinks from the water bottle, his eyes remaining wide and locked onto Bullion (who is off-panel).
BILLY (thinking) (1): It's NOT a date!
BILLY (thinking) (2): Be cool be cool be cool be cool be cool be cool--
(DRINKING SFX): GLUG GLUG GLUG
PANEL 2: Bullion laces her fingers together and rests her chin on them in a cuter version of the Gendo pose, albeit with her elbows spread farther apart to make room for her chest, which once again is resting against the table. Her expression is serious, but with a hint of sadness in her eyes.
BULLION (1): Now.
BULLION (2): It's really important that you answer these questions.
PANEL 3: Narrower panel. Billy lowers the water bottle away from his mouth. He's no longer shaking and properly focusing on Bullion, having realized that something's up.
BILLY: ...Yeah, sure. What do you want to ask me?
PANEL 4: Wide panel. Bullion and Billy sit at the table in profile, silhouetted. Over Bullion's head is an image of Granny Glory smiling and waving. Over Billy's head is an image of Granny in her younger days as Great Glory I, unleashing hellfire from her Gatling gun and roaring with the glory of battle.
BULLION: Do you remember Granny Glory?
BILLY: The old gal on the war posters with the huge gun?
PANEL 5: Olympian stands up in surprise, putting his front paws on the table.
OLYMPIAN: So you DO remember her!
BILLY: Well, yeah! Kinda hard to forget someone with a gun that big!
PANEL 6: Olympian, Bullion, and Billy are once again silhouetted. Even in silhouette, we can tell that Olympian is hanging his head sadly. Behind them is an image of the static blob in the music store.
OLYMPIAN: (Sigh) If only...
BULLION (1): Next: You remember that thing we fought yesterday?
BILLY: That busted-TV blob thing messing up the music store?
BULLION (2): That's the one!
PAGE 4
PANEL 1: Close-up of Billy's expression. He's shocked by what he's hearing, but at the same time he's realizing it sounds kind of familiar.
BULLION (O.S.) (1): That thing, whatever it is, it... "erases" people. It doesn't just abduct them, it removes them from people's memories, as well as any memory of itself, as if neither of them ever existed!
BULLION (O.S.) (2): ...We think Granny Glory was one of its victims.
BILLY (small text, to himself): Like they never existed...?
PANEL 2: Billy puts a fist to his chin in thought. Bullion clenches her fists and grits her teeth in annoyance at being reminded of Betty.
BILLY: Hey... You remember Roller Betty?
BULLION: Urgh, don't remind me!
PANEL 3: Bullion and Billy are silhouetted once again. Over their heads are images of Roller Betty: one in her waitress uniform, skating and carrying a tray; one of her clinging to a very uncomfortable Billy, her head surrounded by little hearts; and one where she's wielding a knife with an evil smile.
BULLION (1): She's that psychotic skating waitress who became your "biggest fan" and invited herself into your old gang! She was keener on carving me up into gold nuggets than most of the supervillains I've fought!
BULLION (2): Why bring her up?
BILLY: Because I think she's vanished too!
(cont.)
PANEL 4: Billy is again silhouetted, positioned in the lower-left corner of the panel, facing left. Behind him is a flashback image depicting Billy asking his gang a question, his arms raised in a quizzical shrug. The gang are a group of assorted '50s greaser toughs, each noodling with their own instruments. They're reacting to his question with blank-faced confusion.
BILLY: Before Johnny possessed me, I realized I hadn't seen her around in a while. That was weird enough for someone as obsessed as her, but even weirder was that none of the boys remembered her at all!
FLASHBACK GREASER: Roller Betty? Never heard of the chick, boss!
PANEL 5: Olympian lowers his head in thought. Bullion likewise leans on the table, fist to her chin. Billy is hungrily chowing down on a sandwich, but is still keeping up with the discussion.
OLYMPIAN: Another disappearance... What's the connection? It feels like it couldn't be purely random, but there's no way to question people about folks they don't remember!
BULLION: And why is it the three of us can remember them?
BILLY: These are some heavy questions...
PANEL 6: Bullion sits up straight and looks down at her chest, crossing her arms under it and hefting it up. Billy does a shocked spit take, spraying crumbs everywhere.
BULLION (1): With some... VERY heavy answers! Because the only connection I can see between us...
BULLION (2): ...is THESE!
BILLY: PTHHOOO!!
PAGE 5
PANEL 1: Billy gawks open-mouthed at Bullion, unable to believe that she actually just said that. Bullion remains calm, and continues to elaborate.
BILLY: W-w-what?! What's that supposed to mean?!
BULLION: So far, the only people unaffected by those things – that's you, me, and Olympian – are also the only ones who ever noticed how... endowed I am!
OLYMPIAN: That's why we tracked you down in the first place, kid! We needed to corroborate that theory!
PANEL 2: Angle from over Bullion's shoulder as she points at Billy while she speaks. Billy switches from looking aghast at Bullion's "accusation" to putting a curled index finger to his lips as he starts thinking about what she's saying. (Whatever that double-faced visual is called.)
BULLION: Didn't you ever find it odd that you seemed to be the only guy drooling over me?
BILLY (1): D-drool--?! But I never-- I didn't-- I--
BILLY (2): Actually, now that you mention it...
PANEL 3: Bullion fixes a pointed look at Johnny's guitar. Despite being unable to move or show any expression, the guitar somehow looks nervous.
BULLION: And that reminds me: I have a few questions for you too, "Johnny!"
JOHNNY: M-me? What'd I do?!
(cont.)
PANEL 4: Bullion continues with a fiercely determined interrogative look on her face. She's positioned in the lower-right corner of the panel. The rest of the panel is taken up by a flashback to issue 3, page 3, panel 2, with the Music Devil launching himself into the air to attack Bullion.
BULLION (1): When we fought back at that liquor store*, you called me "oversized!"
BULLION (2): That means you can see them just like we can!
EDITOR'S NOTE: *Issue #3.
PANEL 5: Slightly low angle with Johnny's guitar in the foreground. For the first time since his defeat, we can see Johnny's face reflected on the guitar: like the guitar itself, his features are less demonic, though still not quite human, and he looks less malevolent overall. Bullion is standing and leaning over the table, continuing to grill him, and Billy looks down at him, blushing slightly with embarrassment at Johnny's dialogue.
JOHNNY (1): Fine, fine, you caught me out!
JOHNNY (2): Honestly, I saw you in the kid's memories when I first took control of him. I figured his mind was exaggerating things, but you, uh... definitely lived up to your image!
BILLY (small text): Ah, jeez...
BULLION: Not the point! As a demon, you have a perspective on things that we don't! Now spill what you know or I'll wring your strings!
PANEL 6: Closeup on Johnny's reflection. He looks nervous, and holds up his hands protectively.
JOHNNY (1): Okay, no need to get violent! I have no idea what those blob things are, but I'll tell ya what I DO know!
JOHNNY (2): Lemme tell ya how things have been going for us demons lately...
You know, I never thought about Johnny being able to see them, not in a story context beyond his possession anyway. I just figured he was outside of the scope of that sort of thing.
Do you mean to say that the cracks in reality cased by the CCA snatching people also weakened its own barrier keeping ghouls out of reality?
That's actually a really good motive for Johnny. I always thought he'd just use the voice to directly control other demons, but this is way more evil.
My original intention on this page with Billy was he was going to ask "What if Iris has been disappeared?", but he got cut off before he could ask it with her showing up.
Your take on that exchange is better I feel.
Well that's different.
Has a better dramatic flair though.
Originally I viewed the pastor and the cloud as not actually working together. He worked to save the people from the cloud, but the cloud didn't give a shit about what he was doing one way or the other, disregarding his actions as inconsequential.
Later, after it tries to kill him, he realizes this and why he's willing to turn on it: because he really does want to save people from it, even if it comes at the cost of not being able to save people from themselves.
I don't think I have any complaints with these changes.
Nice work!
>Do you mean to say that the cracks in reality cased by the CCA snatching people also weakened its own barrier keeping ghouls out of reality?
Well, I suppose I didn't realize/forgot that the snatching was doing that, but it works from an unintentionally self-destructive angle.
>My original intention on this page with Billy was he was going to ask "What if Iris has been disappeared?", but he got cut off before he could ask it with her showing up.
Yeah, I figured that, but then I also realized that if she had, the dean would have had no idea who Audrey was talking about.
Yeah.
Overall I think we've established that Billy isn't too bright in regards to that sort of thing.
I wonder what Jade Empress's relationship with Hell is like.
>I wonder what Jade Empress's relationship with Hell is like.
In some situations it's alright for different mysticisms to not always cross over
I'd be fine with her not really having any thought on it other than it being silly christian superstitious nonsense
True. Though sometimes going down the thought rabbit hole on something like this can lead to ideas for something else that do work.
>tfw angels exist in your story but they're incomprehensible cosmic horrors that don't directly interfere in the comic at all
I remember reading about people not knowing how to accurately portray heaven because people themselves are inherently flawed and can't comprehend anything "all-good" (especially our artists/writers since this will essentially make a comic boring to think of a story that isn'tin any way chaotic).
Personally I don't care of heaven and hell does get involved and you're right it will get boring. Just stick to GGU being the one in charge of her own story kicking ass.
>fine with her not really having any thought on it other than it being silly christian superstitious nonsense
It's better than Billy-Beta exploring a cliche GG multiverse of heaven and hell.
PAGE 6
PANEL 1: Flashback panel. Two images float in a collage: the first is a demonic-looking silhouette whispering into the ear of a man, who listens intently; the second shows the same silhouette gleefully showing off the man's soul (resembling a glowing, floating representation of the man's head with a despairing expression) to another silhouetted demon, which is grinning and applauding.
JOHNNY (NARR.) (1): "Time was, things were grand. We'd pop up here to the mortal realm, cut a few deals, corrupt a few souls, and head back down with the day's loot. It was good, dishonest work, and we enjoyed it!"
JOHNNY (NARR.) (2): "Then, just a few years ago, something weird happened."
PANEL 2: Flashback panel. Small demon silhouettes pound fruitlessly against the background, like they're trapped inside an invisible force field. The larger silhouette of the Devil shoots a fiery energy blast at the "force field" to no effect.
JOHNNY (NARR.) (1): "All of a sudden, SOMETHING – some kinda force – blocked our path topside! No idea what it was or where it came from, but none of us could get through! Even the Devil himself couldn't put a scratch on it!"
JOHNNY (NARR.) (2): "We realized that demonic objects that were still in the mortal realm, like my guitar and the kid's comb, didn't get kicked out, but we ourselves were daemon non grata, you get me?"
PANEL 3: Flashback panel. We see Johnny's guitar sitting in the music shop where Billy found it. Johnny's silhouette form squeezes out of a tiny seam in the air and enters his guitar, causing it to glow an evil red.
JOHNNY (NARR.): "But then just recently, tiny little cracks started to show up! They weren't enough to actually weaken the blockade, but I was able to squeeze my way through one! I got back into my guitar, called out to the kid, and you know the rest!"
(cont.)
PANEL 4: Back to the present. Bullion is still leaning over the table as she and the others listen to Johnny's story. She looks sardonically skeptical.
BULLION: Thanks for the update on demonic events, but what's the connection?
JOHNNY (1): Sheesh! And I thought you were the brains of this outfit!
BILLY: Hey!
JOHNNY (2): My demonic senses showed me there's a connection between the blob and the blockade! They both come from the same source!
PANEL 5: An imagine-spot panel. Johnny, as the Music Devil, is lounging across a demonic throne with his hands behind his head and his feet up on one armrest, grinning in malevolent triumph and surrounded by flames.
JOHNNY (NARR.): "After I saw what the kid's voice did to the blob, I figured if I took over his body completely, I could use his powers to control the blockade! With total control over passage topside, I could bargain my way to reigning supreme over all demonkind!"
PANEL 6: Back to reality. Bullion, Olympian, and Billy think over what they've heard, ignoring Johnny's pity party.
JOHNNY (1): Instead I wound up the kid's servant and forced to – ugh – be good.
JOHNNY (2): Yay for me.
BULLION: This... may be worse than we feared.
OLYMPIAN: No kidding! Making folks vanish was bad enough, but effectively trapping the Devil himself? We're gonna need some extra brains to help us come up with a plan to handle this!
PAGE 7
PANEL 1: Bullion leans back (putting her hands on the seat to keep her balance), looks up at the sky, and heaves a weary sigh. She's not looking forward to what's coming. Billy has raised a burger to his mouth, but freezes in shock at the mention of Iris's name.
BULLION (1): Which means... (sigh)
BULLION (2): ...we're going to need Iris.
BILLY (1): !
BILLY (2): I-Iris?!
PANEL 2: A visibly panicked Billy fakes a grin and attempts to play dumb. Badly. Bullion just gives him a resigned look, knowing what she needs to do now.
BILLY: U-uh-- who's Iris? I don't know any Iris!
BULLION (1): ...All right.
BULLION (2): Since we're bringing Iris in on this, I may as well put all my cards on the table now.
PANEL 3: Angle from behind Billy, who looks utterly stunned as Bullion lays out the truth, fixing him with a dead-serious look.
BULLION (1): I know – I've always known – that you're Billy Rockwell. You went to Platinum City High School alongside Iris Lodell... and me--
BULLION (2): Audrey Page!
(cont.)
PANEL 4: Billy holds his head in shock, his eyes wide, like his whole world has been flipped upside-down. On each side of his head is a waist-up image of one of Audrey's identities: On the left is Golden Girl with her hands heroically on her hips, and on the right is Audrey in her high-school civilian look, her hands held sweetly in front of her. Arm positions aside, the poses are identical. In the background behind Billy's head is a large equal sign connecting the two, representing Billy grasping the truth.
BILLY (thinking) (1): Golden Girl... is Audrey?!
BILLY (thinking) (2): Audrey... is Golden Girl?!
BILLY (thinking) (3): They're the same girl?!
BILLY (thinking) (4): But then... that means--
PANEL 5: Billy grips his head with both hands and yells in shock and disbelief, startling Olympian. Bullion just looks mildly exasperated, resting her chin in her hand.
BILLY: --Iris was RIGHT?!
OLYMPIAN: You honestly couldn't tell?! Kid, did you really think there were TWO girls running around with figures like that?
JOHNNY: My defeat just gets more humiliatin'...
BULLION: (sigh!)
PANEL 6: Bullion continues speaking, trying to steer the conversation back on track. Billy is not quite listening, distracted by another sudden realization.
BULLION: Anyway -- yes, Iris was right about me being Golden Girl. She can see them, too, which is how she figured it out. It always drove her up the wall that--
BILLY: Hey, wait a minute!
PAGE 8
PANEL 1: Billy has regained his composure, sporting a huge ladykiller smile as he smoothly runs his comb through his hair.
BILLY (1): You knew one of your own classmates was a supervillain-- and you never ratted me out!
BILLY (2): Guess you've really been looking out for me this whole time!
PANEL 2: Angle is from Bullion's side of the table. While she continues to talk, Billy is off in a daydream, not paying any attention to what Bullion is saying. He continues combing his hair, with musical notes around his head indicating that he's humming to himself. Olympian stares at Billy, annoyed.
BULLION: Don't flatter yourself too much, Billy. It's not like anyone would've believed me if I'd told them -- just look at how everyone treated Iris!
BILLY (thinking): My own golden guardian angel...
OLYMPIAN (thinking): This kid's all hair and no brains...
PANEL 3: Flashback panel. In a school hallway, Iris is holding up a picture of Golden Girl, pointing at it and shouting angrily. Other students are either making a show of ignoring her or brushing her off. Audrey (high school age, i.e. short) is standing a distance away from Iris, trying to look innocent, but is also embarrassed by the spectacle.
BULLION (NARR.) (1): "She'd go on and on about me being Golden Girl, and everyone acted like she was out of her mind!"
BULLION (NARR.) (2): "It drove her up the wall that no one else seemed to notice what was perfectly obvious to her!"
(cont.)
PANEL 4: Flashback panel. Profile shot of Iris confronting Audrey. Iris has her arms folded, and is directing a squinty glare of stone-cold “you know what you did” fury at Audrey's chest. Audrey is visibly nervous, with a big fake “I have no idea what you're talking about” grin on her face.
BULLION (NARR.) (1): “You see, she could see them, too, but she couldn't seem to understand that no one else could! And she could get rather... testy about that.”
BULLION (NARR.) (2): “It made a lot of our interactions awkward, to say the least!”
PANEL 5: Page-width panel, returning to the present. Establishing shot of the Knox City University campus. Students are hurrying from class to class. Audrey and Billy, in civilian dress, are walking onto the campus. Audrey is wearing a cute 1960s dress, one that could conceivably be worn over her costume, as well a bucket hat and large round sunglasses. She's also carrying a large handbag with a flower pattern on it; Olympian is hiding inside, but isn't currently visible. Billy is wearing an unbuttoned vest over a buttoned-up shirt, jeans, and has a guitar case slung over one shoulder. (With the wider angle of an establishing shot, not all of this needs to be evident. We'll see them in more detail on the next page.)
AUDREY (1): ...And that's why I'm really not keen on seeing her again. I mean, she was so set on proving herself right that she enrolled here at Knox City University to keep an eye on me!
BILLY: I knew she could be intense, but jeez! She must've been a bigger pain than the supervillains!
AUDREY (2): Still, we need her help, and desperate times call for desperate measures!
AUDREY (small text) (3): And keep it down about the supervillains! I didn't let you in on my secret identity so you could broadcast it to the whole campus!
PAGE 9
PANEL 1: Large vertical panel. Head-on, full-body shot of Audrey and Billy making their way across the campus. Billy is visibly embarrassed by his faux pas in the previous panel, rubbing the back of his head. Olympian remains hidden, so the tail of his speech balloon pokes into the side of the handbag.
BILLY (small text): Oop, sorry...
AUDREY: Look, let's just find Iris and try not to make a scene. We don't want to stick out too much.
OLYMPIAN: Ignoring the obvious smart-alecky response...
PANEL 2: Olympian pops his head out of the handbag. Audrey rests her hand on his head, like she's scratching his ears while pushing him back down into the bag.
OLYMPIAN: ...But with those outfits, I'd say you're sticking out enough as it is!
AUDREY (1): I mean Iris is likely going to make a scene.
AUDREY (2): Now get back in there before someone sees YOU sticking out!
PANEL 3: Angled from behind Audrey and Billy's heads as they walk through a crowd of people, all talking and laughing, and all of them wearing identical, rectangular bar-shaped sunglasses that completely cover their eyes, nose bridge included. It's an odd style that doesn't really line up with any actual sunglasses of the period.
AUDREY (small text) (1): Though I'm not sure how anyone here would notice anything with those weird shades on...
BILLY: So where do we start looking for Iris?
AUDREY (2): This is college, Billy. We start with...
PANEL 4: Page-width panel. In a hallway outside the dean's office, Billy leans against the wall beside the door in an appropriately slackerly manner, holding Olympian's handbag hiding place. He looks up expectantly as Audrey exits the office, smiling and waving goodbye.
AUDREY (NARR.) "...The dean's office!"
AUDREY: Okay! Thank you very much, sir!
BILLY: I'm guessing it went well?
PAGE 10
PANEL 1: Audrey shuts the office door, her expression changing to one of concern/worry. Olympian pops his head out of the bag again.
AUDREY (1): Yes, but it was strange. He's usually not that cheerful – or the type to wear sunglasses!
OLYMPIAN: So the faculty's picking up on student trends! So what? Where's Iris?
AUDREY (2): She's in her Journalism class right now, but it lets out in a few minutes! It's at the east end of the campus!
PANEL 2: In a different hallway elsewhere on the campus, Audrey and Billy watch attentively as students file out of the Journalism classroom. All of them wearing the same bar-shaped sunglasses.
AUDREY (whispering) (1): Those same shades again...
BILLY (whispering): Trend or not, this is starting to get weird!
AUDREY (2): There! I see her!
PANEL 3: Audrey runs up to Iris as she exits the class. She's older and taller, but otherwise hasn't changed her appearance too much... except that she's also wearing the bar-shaped sunglasses UNDER her regular glasses. She seems to be in a daze, cheerful yet confused. Even her speech balloons have an odd, dreamy look to them.
AUDREY (1): Iris! Come with me, quickly! We have to talk!
IRIS (dreamy): Oh, hello! Do I... know you?
AUDREY (2): What...?
(cont.)
PANEL 4: Angle from behind Iris's head. Audrey tips her shades down to show more of her face.
AUDREY: Iris, it's me, Audrey! Audrey Page from high school, remember?
IRIS (dreamy) (1): Page...?
IRIS (normal) (2): Page...
PANEL 5: Panels 5-7 are a row of closeups of Iris. She now looks furious as she recognizes Audrey, and the bar shades actually shrink to show the whites of her eyes, but they still hide her irises.
IRIS (shouting) (1): PAGE!
IRIS (normal): You...! You...
PANEL 6: Iris's expression changes from fury to confused squinting, like she can't see something right in front of her. The bar shades are returning to their normal size.
IRIS (half-dreamy): You...
PANEL 7: The bar shades are back at full size, and Iris is back in her daze, smiling in cheerful confusion.
IRIS (dreamy): Who are you again?
PAGE 11
PANEL 1: Audrey and Billy gawk in shock at what they've just seen. Audrey has her hands up to her mouth, looking horrified. Billy is tipping his shades in disbelief, his jaw hanging open. Olympian peeks out of the handbag, just plain weirded out, but taking it more in stride than the others.
AUDREY: Oh, my goodness...
BILLY: Uh, y-you guys saw that too, right?
OLYMPIAN: Well, I can safely say that's not the sort of scene I expected!
PANEL 2: Audrey grabs Iris's hands by the wrists, holding them up to a point where they're unintentionally pressing into her chest. Her expression is fearful and worried. Iris begins to sweat, and looks like she's in pain.
AUDREY: Iris, what's happened to you?! Don't you recognize me?
IRIS: I-- I--
PANEL 3: Page-width panel. We see three images in sequence: First, a closeup of Iris's face, still looking pained and beginning to panic. She's sweating even harder than before and gritting her teeth. Second, a closeup of Iris's hands pressed into Audrey's bust. And third, an extreme closeup of Iris's right eye as the bar shades begin to crack. Across the background is a line representing Iris's heartbeat, like the one on a heart monitor, getting increasing erratic with each part of the sequence.
IRIS (first image): I-- I--
IRIS (second image, tailless balloon) (1): I--
IRIS (second image, tailless balloon) (2): I--
IRIS (third image): I-- I do!
(cont.)
PANEL 4: Iris wrenches her left hand out of Audrey's grip and grabs at the bar shades with it. Audrey is caught by surprise, and lets go of Iris's other hand in her shock. In the background, other students are noticing the incident, stopping and turning their heads to look.
IRIS (1): G-get it off!
IRIS (2): Get it off of me!
PANEL 5: Closeup of Iris's pain-wracked face. She's hunched over, and her teeth are clenched. The right half of the bar shades has broken off, revealing her right eye, streaming with tears. Her left hand is clawing at the remaining half of the bar shades, almost like she's trying to gouge out her still-hidden left eye.
IRIS: IT HURTS! GET IT OFF!
PAGE 12
PANEL 1: Audrey, still looking alarmed, directs Billy to sing at Iris. He does so, with a bit of uncertainty. Iris visibly calms down, though her expression is still a bit pained as she holds her head with one hand.
AUDREY: Billy! Do something before she hurts herself!
BILLY (1): Me...? Oh! Right!
BILLY (singing) (2): Hey, girl, don't you frown / Calm yourself and tell us how this all went down!
IRIS: I... I remember now...!
PANEL 2: Flashback panel. Down shot of students gathering around a makeshift podium set up in the center of the campus, the small crowd a mix of curiosity and confusion. Iris is among them, looking skeptical. A few are holding protest signs with the peace symbol on them. Pastor Stone of the Status Quo, last seen in issue #1, is standing on the podium, but the angle prevents a clear view of him.
IRIS (NARR.) (1): “It started yesterday – when that strange man in the plague mask showed up on campus!”
IRIS (NARR.) (2): "He was giving some kind of sermon, saying that he had come to 'save' us!"
PANEL 3: Flashback panel. Up shot of Pastor Stone raising his arms up as strange black “confetti” floats down around him, seemingly from nowhere.
PASTOR STONE (1): O, youth of this era, how immorality walks among you with impunity! But fear not, for salvation is at hand!
PASTOR STONE (2): Lift up your eyes and behold! A gift of purification descends from above!
IRIS (NARR.): "Then he raised his arms, and this black stuff seemed to rain down from out of thin air!"
(cont.)
PANEL 4: Flashback panel. The students watch the confetti with a mix of confusion and mounting fear.
PASTOR STONE (O.S.) (1): Though wickedness pervades this world, it has not been deemed without hope! You shall be but the first of many to receive this gift before the time of judgment comes!
PASTOR STONE (O.S.) (2): Accept this gift, and reject the path of the modern world and its falsehoods!
IRIS (NARR.): "It seemed to ignore the breeze in the air, directing itself towards the gathered crowd..."
PANEL 5: Flashback panel. The confetti latches onto the students' faces, spreading across their eyes. Some try to grab it, some try to wipe their eyes on their sleeves, but most just panic.
PASTOR STONE (O.S.) (1): For this world seeks to shatter its own laws, ushering in the destruction of all that is and must be! It seeks to behold what must never be seen!
PASTOR STONE (O.S.) (2): Thus, the path to salvation--
PANEL 6: Flashback panel. The confetti has fully covered all the students' eyes now. No one is panicking anymore; instead, all of them are staring up at Pastor Stone with the same bland, uniform smile.
PASTOR STONE (O.S.): --is to embrace blindness!
IRIS (NARR.): "...And everything after that is just...blank!"
PAGE 13
PANEL 1: Back to present. Audrey is cradling a distraught Iris in her arms. Iris's uncovered eye is still crying; she's looking at Audrey's chest, but her gaze remains unfocused. The other students are silently gathered around them. Billy gives them an apprehensive look, aware that they're surrounded but unsure whether a fight's about to break out. Olympian's handbag is now sitting on the ground. He's watching Iris with concern.
IRIS: I can't see...! It's like I'm in a fog, and there's something right in front of me – something important! But I can't see it!
OLYMPIAN: That's disturbing...
AUDREY: That's horrific!
PASTOR STONE (O.S.): That is salvation!
PANEL 2: Pastor Stone stands in the open doorway at the end of the hall, his arms behind his back. He's flanked by two more students with the bars over their eyes.
PASTOR STONE (1): The spirit that cleanses the wicked from the world only takes those that can see it! To blind oneself to the higher truths is to be purified of one's immorality!
PASTOR STONE (2): Blindness is salvation!
PANEL 3: Audrey, still holding Iris, looks up at Pastor Stone (off-panel), surprised to see one of the Status Quo still active. Billy is unslinging his guitar case from his shoulder, and Olympian leaps out of the bag.
AUDREY (1): You--! You're one of the Status Quo!
BILLY: That old robot show?
AUDREY (2): I fought them the other day! I thought they were all shorted out!*
EDITOR'S NOTE: *Back in issue #1!
(cont.)
PANEL 4: Pastor Stone spreads his arms wide, gesturing to his new flock.
PASTOR STONE (1): Yes, though it pained me to abandon my family, I knew one of us had to survive to spread the word of salvation! And through my piety, I, Pastor Stone, have been rewarded!
PASTOR STONE (2): The spirit itself has come to dwell within me! And with its power, I am able to bring salvation to all!
PANEL 5: Audrey is now standing defiant, glaring at Pastor Stone (again off-panel). Iris is tightly gripping her shoulders, refusing to let go. Billy has taken Johnny out of his case and stands ready to play. Olympian likewise has a fierce expression on his face.
BILLY: Man, I thought robots were supposed to be all logical, but bird-face here is talking cuckoo!
JOHNNY: Not as cuckoo as it sounds, kid! I'm gettin' a familiar vibe from that tin man!
AUDREY: Which means his "spirit" must be...
OLYMPIAN: The cloud! Get ready for another fight!
PANEL 6: Pastor Stone recoils in offense as Audrey's hat, sunglasses, and dress fly in from off-panel as she changes back into costume.
AUDREY (O.S.) (1): Then I better get changed into my fighting clothes!
AUDREY (O.S.) (2): Good thing I dressed in layers!
PASTOR STONE (1): LASCIVIOUSNESS!
PASTOR STONE (2): Had you accepted the gift of blindness, I would have been willing to grant forgiveness for your misguided ways, girl, but with such a wanton display, you leave me no choice!
PAGE 14
PANEL 1: Bullion stands ready in full costume, adjusting her glove as she puts it on. Iris is staring at her chest, but again doesn't seem to actually be seeing it.
IRIS: It's right in front of me -- but what is it?! Why can't I--?
BULLION: Iris, I know it's hard right now, but you need get a grip on yourself and hide! Something big's about to go down!
PANEL 2: Closeup of Iris as she rears back and grips her head in pain. The bar over her eye regenerates, covering her free eye once again.
IRIS: Big...? Something's... big... and important! But why can't I see it?!
BULLION (O.S.): IRIS! No! Fight it!
PANEL 3: Pastor Stone dramatically raises his hands outward. A static-y glow surrounds his head and hands.
PASTOR STONE (1): O, spirit! I beseech you to come forth and deliver righteous judgment upon these wicked souls!
PASTOR STONE (2): The girl struggles against your salvation! Make her the instrument of your divine wrath, and set her back on the right path!
(STATIC SFX): KKSSSSHHHKK
(cont.)
PANEL 4: The static cloud bursts from Pastor Stone (in the background) and flies across the hall, toward the reader. As it passes a couple of students, the bars over their eyes dissolve into static and return to their source in the cloud. The students return to their senses, reacting with groggy confusion.
PASTOR STONE: Flee from the path of the spirit, my children, lest the spirit's presence rob you of your salvation!
STUDENT 1: Huh?
STUDENT 2: What...?
PANEL 5: The static cloud strikes Iris and enters her body, surrounding her with the static-y glow. Bullion puts up an arm to shield her eyes.
IRIS: GYAAHH!!
BULLION: IRIS!!
(STATIC SFX): KKSSSHHHMMPP!
PANEL 6: Bullion, Billy, and Olympian look on in shock as Iris floats up off the ground, surrounded by the static glow. Three rings of black energy whirl around Iris: One around her eyes, one around her chest, and one around her hips. Bullion and Billy continue shielding their eyes.
IRIS: W-W-W-Why-y-y-y-y--
BULLION: We've got to help her!
BILLY: What's happening to her?!
OLYMPIAN: I don't know, but it looks bad--
PAGE 15
SPLASH PAGE: The possessed Iris stands before the group, still glowing with static. Censor bars wrap around her eyes, chest, and hips. Her arms have turned a similar black, each arm extending out into a blade or whip where her hands should be. She's looking around in a blind panic; she's still conscious, but no longer in control of her body.
OLYMPIAN: --Bad for all of us!
IRIS: WHY CAN'T I SEE ANYTHING?!
TO BE CONTINUED
Is that the monthly meeting?
The shit Belle puts up with...
Got the Blueblood vs Tantrum doc handy? I was mid read but windows update closed the private window I had it in.
Yeah, sure.
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pTzk9VfgrFWyBM1uI4kkunzWv6446GXw3Oij-CCHJ_g/edit?usp=sharing
This whole story is a lot more "flowery" than what I typically write. I just wanted to shift gears and do something a little different from comic scripts. Just to see if it could work for me.
Thenk
So what do you think of it? Is there a way you can show me how to write like that?
What do I think of the story that I wrote?
I think that the books I've been reading this year have been heavily influencing my own writing style and I'm still trying to figure out if I like it or not. It's certainly less dry now at least, if more ramble-y.
As for the subject matter, I'm satisfied with it. It was a prompt I posted into the threads back in 2016 and was able to expand it into a full short story in about two weeks after deciding to commit to the idea.
As for how to write like that... What I do is look at my characters - their hopes, fears, and desires - I let what the characters want decide what sort of story they'll be in, then come up with a plot. Are they fighting something, searching for something, forced to interact with someone, etc. Then the circumstances come into play to make this situation come to be.
Once I have a basic outline for the story (beginning, middle, end, cool scenes that I personally feel excited to write when I get there) I let the characters loose and see where they go with it. Are the characters I picked out really going to react the way I plan for them to or are they going to say "no, I'd do this instead" and do something better than I had planned?
A really good motivator are the "cool scenes I feel excited to write". If I can think up a bunch of scenes like that then I'll feel energized enough to come up with everything needed leading up to them.
It's like an itch. Once I get an idea for a story in my head and is stays there for too long I really have to work through it to get it to leave my head so I can think of other things.
>books
comic books or novels?
>prompts
what?
>characters and story
so you basically go elaborate as a novella, with feelings and the like? I mean does it seem worth it or does a script for a comic seem more fitting and more fun?
I'm not certain if I could work on a novel for me at this point so I'm considering becoming a writer for the comic kind, as it seems more fitting to my kind of self.
Novels.
Prompt - a short summary of the idea you expand from.
I've written both short stories and comic scripts. My approach is the same for both. I wouldn't say one is more fitting/fun than the other, though a comic script might be easier since the structure of it has you describing the scene for each panel.
He managed to reproduce or did he find the baby in a dumpster?
I bet he uses his addition to wake up quicker by taking a shot.
>He managed to reproduce or did he find the baby in a dumpster?
I'll be working on the first page tonight after work
Find me new pics of Jack and Marley ship!
oh glad to see this thread again
ok I will continue the Dynamo league greentexts
>Meeting the Supreme Justice Legion
>After Marmot-man left both Liza and Willow he went down to a secret room in the Moon Base
> After going through the identification devices he was able to enter the "heart of Moon" where the Supreme Justice Legion resign
> As he was walking he was able to feel the existence of another person behind and then he sighed
>Marmot-man: "Josephine I can feel your existence no need to 'hunt and chase' me"
> No one answered which made him sigh even harder
>Marmot-man(a little annoyed): "Josephine, are you gonna try animal techniques against me?"
> No one responded so Marmot-man decided to just continue walking
>and with the first step he takes, a giant grey wolf appears and jumps on him
>Marmot-man jumps back and then the wolf starts unleashing Smoke from their mouth
>Marmot-man sighs again and then takes off his mask
>Marmot man idiot it's me, Joe!"
> The wolf seems confused and then starts laughing
>Marmot-man(pissed): "it's not funny Josephine!!"
> The wolf Shapeshift into a tall bulky woman
> That was Josephine aka Wolf-Huntress a member of Supreme Justice Legion and also the leader of the sisterhood of The Canine and kinda Liza's older sister
>Wolf-Huntress(chuckling): "i'm sorry Joe, i didn't know that it was you, I didn't recognize your smell or even your voice hehe"
>Marmot-man(teasing): "A wolf who's bad in recognizing people's smell what a shame"
>Wolf-huntress smiles and asks him about Liza and his daughter Willow and Marmot-man starts smiling and chatting with her
> Before they were able to chat even more another member joined the conversation
> It was Femto-man the man who can shrink to an atomic scale
>Femto-man:"oh hello there"
>Marmot-man:"oh hello you must be Femto-man,nice to meet you!i'm Marmot-man"
>Femto-man:"oh nice to meet you too Marmot-man,so what brings you here? if I may ask"
>Marmot-man:"well of course i just went to check on something here,also need to meet a member"
>Wolf-huntress:"Hmm who?"
>Marmot-man:"i'm looking for "the Lunarian" or at least one of them"
>Wolf-huntress and Femto-man looked at each other in complete confusion
>Wolf-Huntress: "Are you sure you want to meet them?"
>Marmot-man: "Yeah I know that they are the best creatures to talk with especially when we are on the moon but I should do it"
>Wolf-huntress:"Good luck with that Jo-...i mean Marmot-man"
>Marmot-man thanks her and then goes to the next room
>Femto-man(whispering to Wolf-huntress):"he sure is different than a regular hero just like you told me"
>Wolf-huntress:"Yep! this is the man who was banging my sister hehe"
>Femto-man (looks at her shocked):"too much info Huntress! "
Smashed and slammed that coyote?
indeed they 'smashed'
also to clarify: Wolf-huntress is not her biological sister but it's more of a given title in the sisterhood of the Canine
I'm wondering if it would be easier to just write comic scripts for these characters rather than full comics. This shit takes forever, but I value it too much to do anything but the best. I don't think that's a problem but it's unsustainable
Easier? Yes. But do you really want to give up on the fun of the dream? I'll write comic scripts and know full well they'll 99% never be drawn, but I'll still write them as best I can with with the intention of them being drawn in mind. If I'm lucky then someone will like what I've made and I'll get to talk to someone about the ideas I had. If I'm extra lucky then someone will like it so much they'll draw a picture inspired by it. And if I win the lucky lottery then someone will actually draw the comic I imagined just because they liked the idea so damn much they felt they needed to be a part of it. It's stupidly unlikely, but I've seen it happen at least three times now, so I cannot dismiss it.
Unsustainable? My good anon, when, at any point in the history of /coc/, has it been about sustainability? This is just me talking out of my ass, so feel free to disregard and disagree, but I've always felt /coc/ has been more about the rush, the feeling of making something new or making something your own, or just plain making something rather than having made nothing. There's been years of dead threads before, but yet we're still here, so the dream can't be dead.
I feel like there are a lot of anons who could make things, but don't because they don't feel like it would be perfect or good enough. Every time someone in /coc/ craps out a comic, no matter the quality of the artwork, I'm down right flabbergasted by it. That someone actually managed to make a thing from start to finish.
Good words, anon. Thank you
I knew something was bothering me with my version of this image. Cinemaphilenrad's head was too big and Cinemaphilelette had a long neck.
Those are inspiring words, anon. I should get back at CMM. I've been putting it off for so long because every time I try and continue it I just get frustrated with my output that I start again from scratch.
>The shit Belle puts up with...
And more shit to come
They don't keep a consistent schedule but they're now discussing of including girls taller than them since most short small-boobed women are heroes.
With what you guys are putting out, it always is.
And goodnight everyone.
Let's hope the thread doesn't get swallowed up by the title wave of spam.
Gonna finish this story. It’s already drafted like 8 pages that I did a while back
Newman uses the rope.
Finna grow himself some strange fruits.
Whose cat?
Newman's ugly stray cat that he adopted
Likes to steal food and runs under the couch. bites and scratches people/other animals if they come near when she's eating
Also likes to aggressively headbutt Newman for headpats
Ate Conrad's airpod once
>Ate Conrad's airpod once
does her tummy play music
like the croc from Peter Pan's ticking clock
Yes
But when it plays it gives her a stomachache because Conrad has bad taste in music
All those cartoon theme songs.
He probably still has a connection to it via bluetooth or something and loads in all the themes from the cartoons he knows will annoy Newman the most.
The AirPod eventually makes its way out, one way or another
Excellent.
Every day they're out there making ducktales. Woo-ooo.
A doodle of Conrad telling Newman to stop bringing in ducks from the park.
Bump
Bump
>The Lunarian
>Marmot-man entered the next room and started calling The Lunarian
> Instead he found another Member of the Supreme Justice Legion waiting for him
>Marmot-man: "Oh Greetings Alan..or should I call you Judge Radical"
>Judge Radical is a bionic human wearing a combat uniform and a red mask-helmet hiding his face
>he stayed silent
>Marmot-man: "Still not that talkative I see"
>Judge Radical didn't say a word
>Marmot-man: "Cool cool.....so I need to go meet The Lunarian do you know where are they?"
>Judge Radical pointed to the second door on his right
>Marmot-man thanked him and then went on his way and finally entered the room where The Lunarian were
>he looked around looking for them
>Marmot-man: "GREETINGS!!"
>The Lunarian(Ian):"Up there buddy!"
>Marmot-man looked up and found a scientist walking on the wall, he was fixing some inventions up there
>Marmot-man:"Oh Ian? Nice to see you"
> The Lunarian(Ian):"Yes it's Ian ehh...he's not here now, So Marmot-man it's nice to see you here with us...it seems that you were looking for me, what's the problem?"
>Marmot-man:"Well Ian i'm happy to see that you are doing well and yes I wanted to ask you for something"
> The Lunarian(Ian):"Sure thing,how can I help you?"
>Marmot-man: "Well you see...."
> The Lunarian's head started shaking and then he turned his head to Marmot-man
> The Lunarian ( Lunar):"Oh hello Human in rodent disguise.."
>Marmot-man rolled his eyes
>The Lunar-ian (Ian):"Lunar! he was talking to me not you!"
>The Lunar-Ian(Lunar):"he was talking and looking for the both of us"
>The Lunar-ian is the fusion of two creatures:Ian the Super genius Human and Lunar an alien intelligent Parsyte that lived on the moon after direct contact with Ian,it became one with him and gave him physical superpowers and unhinged his Intelligence even more
>Marmot-man:"It's okay you are the same so it doesn't matter to me.."
>The Lunar-Ian(Lunar):"This is true..."
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian):"Yeah i guess he's right"
>Marmot-man:"now as i was Saying....i need the Ultra-Computer to search for something.."
>The Lunar-Ian(Lunar): "The Ultra-Computer? This is interesting what would a human want from the ultra Computer?"
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian):"As much as I hate to admit it He's right why would you need the ultra-computer? is it Something really important?"
>Marmot-man(scratches the back of his head):"hmm define Very important"
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian):"Essential, crucial."
>Marmot-man:"yeah i-...i know what the word means I meant what do you think is 'Important' to use the Ultra-computer"
>The Lunar-Ian(Lunar):"Finding a cosmic criminal, analyzing a deadly situation, Space-time investigation and maybe looking to the other timelines and alternate universes, does that answer your question?"
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian):"Hey Lunar he's a friend treat him with respect will ya?"
>Marmot-man:"It's okay i'm not mad but to answer your question, yes it did answer my question"
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian):" Good and you want to use the ultra-computer to..."
>Marmot-man stays silent for moments and then looks them dead in the eyes
>Marmot-man(serious):"Take me to the past!"
Gotta get back, back to the past!
I only think about that in terms of individual characters, not the narrative as a whole. If enough individual characters have the same or similar themes then I guess the narrative has that theme too.
To people who write scripts: how often do you think about any kind of overarching themes in your narrative?
Do you think about any of this stuff at all?
When I write, I try to include some form of "core" that almost every other aspect of the story ties into. A primary idea that I want to convey or display. I try to convey it in a way that isn't obvious upon first viewing because it's more interesting that way.
When I'm drawing a comic out, I don't think about the theme alot. But I incorporate elements from my life with something I've read from the news or watched on youtube for short plots.
>Trouble in the Timelines I
>The Lunar-ian looked at Marmot-man with complete confusion after he told them that he wants to go back to the past
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian);"ehh excuse me WHAT THE HELL DID YOU JUST SAID?!!"
>Marmot-man:"i said that i want you to take me to the past"
>The Lunar-Ian(Lunar):"are you insane!! this will destroy the spacetime and even our reality and even we wanted to help we can't because the Ultra-computer isn't a time machine.."
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian):"True that... Sorry Marmot-man we can't just play with time travel because you want to..."
>Marmot-man:"But i really need to!! "
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian): "Tell me what's this important thing that would make you put your life in danger like that?"
>Marmot-man sighed and started scratching the back of his head and then looked down
>Marmot-man:"Well you know that i have a daughter right?"
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian/Lunar):"Yes"
>Marmot-man:"she's my world and everything and i want the best for her just like any good father would, this is Why......i taught some techniques to make her a stronger and better hero"
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian):"Wait don't tell me that you taught her...."
>Marmot-man(nodding):"Yes i taught her My fighting Techniques, i Taught her 'NMA' Or Nature's Martial Arts a fighting style I created and used it through the years and then stopped as you both know.."
>The Lunar-Ian(Lunar):" And this is related to you traveling to the past because?"
>Marmot-man:"as i said i might created NMA but i never perfected it personally and stopped improving it years ago and this is why i want to go to the past to tell my past self to not stop improving so i can teach Willow the perfect form before I....nevermind,you see why now?"
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian):"But Marmot-man how about now? you can now improve it without going to the past and all..."
>Marmot-man:"i Can't....i just can't now because of my responsibilities as a hero and a father.....also cause i'm not as young as i was when i created NMA"
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian):"i mean this sounds noble and all but do we have another option?"
>The Lunar-Ian(Lunar):"I'm not sure if we do......wait Ian are you thinking what i'm thinking?"
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian):"hmm OHH yes i see we can try this"
>Marmot-man looked at them in confusion
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian):"Well we can't send you to the past but we can send you to another timeline for a few hours and then return you, we will choose a timeline where you were able to continue your 'improving' so you learn from future self or something this is the only thing that we can do for you"
>Marmot-man:"it's not what i came looking for but ehh sure why not i guess"
>The Lunar-Ian(Ian/Lunar):"are you sure? there's no coming back from this"
>Marmot-man thinks about it for a few minutes
>Marmot-man(even more determined and serious):"YES....YES I AM"
So he'll return in a few hours, but there's also no coming back?
>So he'll return in a few hours, but there's also no coming back?
i didn't actually understand your question
but to put it simply:
-they will send Marmot-man to another timeline because they sent him to the past
-he will be there for a few hours and then they will teleport him back to his timeline
I hope that this answers your question,also I will explain it more in the next green text
I was just wanting clarification since they said he'd be back in a few hours but also there was no going back.
no no he's going to the future (kinda)
look i want to change the time-travel trope a little
so instead of sending him to his universe's past or future he will go to another universe's future because in this story some timelines are way ahead in the future and others are stuck in the past
for example:
>Timeline A: 2023
>Timeline B:2036
>TimelineC:1989
AND SO ON
is it hard to understand or too complicated for the readers ? i want to know and again i will explain more in the next greentexts
>we can send you to another timeline for a few hours and then return you
>are you sure? there's no coming back from this
Do you mean there's no coming back from this in that the information he obtains will be permanently stuck in his mind then?
"Once the process is started there's no stopping it" might've been a better choice of words.
I get that timelines are at different places at the same point.
>Do you mean there's no coming back from this in that the information he obtains will be permanently stuck in his mind then?
yes they were asking him if he sure that he wanted to risk his life and get teleported to another timeline
>"Once the process is started there's no stopping it" might've been a better choice of words.
yeah something would work better
Sunday bugdoodles, mostly character design stuff
That's a big lizard.
Did you get a chance to read the Tantrum VS Blue Blood story yet?
Yes indeed! I was surprised Ada and Marian were so cordial despite the general tension her presence creates in Britainment, it speaks to a history of past encounters. I also enjoyed Regis literally asking for tendies. Truly a man of culture.
It's also an interesting touch that Maitena doesn't really lie so much as twist the truth. Ada does hunt "special" people to increase her own powers, after all. Maitena doesn't know the nature of the boy's abilities, best to play safe if he can spot obvious lies with super-perception or something.
I figured Ada would be "cool and collected" while not dismissing the edgy 90s anti-hero who causes gore on a Hellsing level that her character was spawned from.
Marian I felt should have a handle on herself more than anyone since she's the wrangler/director for Britianment, you don't get to be in charge by being an idiot, or at least you shouldn't. I wrote her a little bit like the M to Ada's 007. It helps that I've written something before with her as the main character.
Maitena was a fun b***h to write since she's a horrible person and doesn't care that she is.
What did you think of the writing style? Good? Bad? Meh?
I was experimenting with a different way of writing with it.
I think you've got the Blueblood attitude in general down with Maitena, of a creature that is answerable to nothing but its own whims and desires. In that, she kind of echoes Regis' bored youth. It's very amusing that the moment he recovers from his adventure he's back to being listless, what a li'l shit!
It definitely shows you're working outside your usual wheelhouse with the writing style, I'd say the main area to address is the punctuation. In going for the more flowery descriptions, sometimes you use commas where periods would serve better, leading to an unusual cadence fairly frequently. As more of a stylistic gripe, there were one or two instances of a word being repeated in quick succession, which I generally warn people off doing.
Overall though, I enjoyed it. The appearance of Ada's devil form after what I expected to be the climax was a particular surprise that had me smiling.
I've gotten Crackdown in a few of these!
After enough time has passed where I can look at it with fresher eyes I'll give it another re-read and see if I can clean up the comma mess. There were a lot of sentences I felt didn't stand well on their own and I didn't feel confident semi-colon welding them together which probably added to the issue.
I wanted to give the demon at least a little characterization since he currently has none.
Glad you liked it overall though. I went through with writing it because of the comic you guys made.
>Glad you liked it overall though. I went through with writing it because of the comic you guys made.
Well, I'm pleased to report that the vote for this month's minicomic was well attended and will be about Skathi! Shortsteel's already got the inks done.
That's cool. I hope it brings in more interest for you guys.
Hope springs eternal. Frankly I'm just glad the handful of patrons we've got engaged with the vote, I worry sometimes
Cant wait to see the Skathi minicomic and good luck!
Thanks! Hopefully it'll be worth the weight.
Great to see for more spotlight time for the other characters! Godspeed with it.
Anyway from yesterday I’ve been in a block with a comic script, any help?
I find the comic stuff is more fun and what not but I’ve got stuck for a good first issue
>Anyway from yesterday I’ve been in a block with a comic script, any help?
What kind of help is needed?
Pretty much everything, as usual.
I got something down for an idea but idk how to execute story character, etc in a way that’s original and could work spectacularly.
I got the kid and his nomad status, just like before, but idk for a good page beginning
>I've gotten Crackdown in a few of these
And I appreciate the hell out of it by the way.
He's a fun character! Plus it's super novel to have someone from outside "my" stable interacting with Lila more than Marbles.
>With what you guys are putting out, it always is.
Shucks, you flatterer!
Very experimental. Looks like the cover to some nineties era alt tabletop game.
There are a couple typical ways to begin things.
A retelling of the character's origins, whether it be their life story summarized, like Clark Kent growing up on the farm, or just the critical moment they became protagonist material, like Peter Parker being bit by the spider.
Alternatively, you can simply show the character doing what he does, his selling point so to speak, and let that be his introduction.
don't worry about making your first attempt spectacular, just getting something that works is the first step.
>he's a fun character!
I'm glad you feel that way, genuinely.
I've always intended for Arthur to end up in the US, him being near Los Palos specifically was kind of something I rolled with since the initial thread.
I've been questioning this decision at times, since I really don't want to be seen as if I'm piggybacking off of LL
I don't really see it like that anymore, instead imagining the stories surrounding him like "Better Call Saul" to Ladybug's "Breaking Bad", if that makes sense.
I guess either way it feels not so good for me. Idk I want his introduction to be something to be good, keep an unique interest in him up, compared with Arthur.
And I mean with the beginning panels, it would be the part of just a scene showing or some sort of weird scene before revealing him, but man this shit is hard
You should draw some of the newer characters that anons have been posting
Interesting thread so far I think.
I hope there will be more to it and it won't just die in the night.
>Trouble in the Timelines II
>In the year 2035, the world had undergone significant changes, and the traditional concept of superheroes had evolved. However, a few heroes like Mighty-Beaver, previously known as Willow Filbert, still clung to the old ideals of heroism.
>On this day, in a bustling city, a gang of burglars had successfully eluded the police after robbing a bank. They thought they had made their getaway.
>Suddenly, a glowing green light appeared in the sky, hurtling towards the fleeing burglars. They attempted to evade it, but it was too late.
>An explosion echoed through the streets, and when the police finally caught up, they found the burglars tied up and defeated.
>Police Officer 1: "Wow, we found them!"
>Police Officer 2: "But who could have done this?"
>A voice came from near the wreckage of the gang's car, revealing the presence of Mighty-Beaver, a rare superhero who clung to the old heroism ideology.
Mighty-Beaver: (firmly) "That would be me."
>Police Officer 2: (expectantly) "Ah, a superhero! So, we need to discuss payment for your help, right?"
>Mighty-Beaver: (annoyed) "No! I don't fight crime for money! I'm not like the others."
>In her thoughts, Mighty-Beaver recalled the teachings of her father, Joe Filbert, who had instilled in her the values of helping others without expecting compensation.
>Mighty-Beaver: (thinking) "My dad would be mad if I accepted money for helping people."
>Frost-Vixen: (panting and catching her breath) "Hey Sis! Oh my goddess, you should have told me you were going to jump that high... woah! I've been running for the last seven minutes!"
>Mighty-Beaver: (apologetic) "Sorry, Sister Vixen. I didn't want them to escape. You should work on your speed..."
>Frost-Vixen: (sarcastic) "Yeah, yeah, I know I'm slow. I'm well aware, thanks!"
>Mighty-Beaver: (determined) "Anyway, let's head home. Our work here is done."
>Frost-Vixen: (nonchalant) "Sure, whatever you say."
>As they began to make their way back home, the sisters strolled through the city streets. It was a moment of quiet reflection before Frost-Vixen broke the silence.
Frost-Vixen: (curious) "So, Willow, remind me again what your dad, Marmot-man, taught you about heroism?"
>Willow's expression turned thoughtful as she considered how to explain her father's ideals.
>Mighty-Beaver: (reflecting) "Well, you know, my dad always said that being a hero wasn't about money or fame. It's about helping people, especially those who can't help themselves."
>Frost-Vixen: (nodding) "That sounds noble, but isn't it a bit idealistic, even for a superhero?"
>Mighty-Beaver: (smiling) "Maybe it is, Kayla, but Dad believed that real heroes never asked for pay. He said that the reward was in making the world a better place, one good deed at a time."
>Frost-Vixen couldn't help but be intrigued by the earnestness in her sister's voice.
>Frost-Vixen: (curious) "Did he ever explain why he felt that way?"
>Mighty-Beaver: (thoughtful) "Yeah, he did. He said that when you help someone without expecting anything in return, it creates a ripple effect of kindness. People see what you do, and it inspires them to help others too."
>Frost-Vixen: (impressed) "Wow, that's a beautiful way to look at it."
>Mighty-Beaver: (smiling) "Yeah, it is. Dad always believed that even the smallest act of kindness could make a big difference. He wanted me to remember that and carry on his legacy."
>Frost-Vixen: (supportive) "And you're doing a great job, Willow. I'm proud to be your sister."
>Mighty-Beaver: (grateful) "Thanks, Kayla. I'm lucky to have you by my side....also he's your dad too so the same duty and hopes apply to you"
So this is a timeline where Joe also had a biological child?
yes this is Right
Frost-Vixen's full name is Skayla Filbert but since she never met Joe she doesn't use that family name just goes with Skayla
also wanted to do a Goten thing from DBZ where he never met Goku and only knew about him from Gohan
>Frost-Vixen: (curious) "So, Willow, remind me again what your dad, Marmot-man, taught you about heroism?"
oh shoot I made a mistake here
Joe Filbert isn't called Marmot-man in this timeline
here's the correction
>Frost-Vixen: (curious) "So, Willow, remind me again what your dad, Green Guardian, taught you about heroism?"
also in
I meant Kayla, not Skyla
idk what's wrong with me
frick i meant
Does his mystical martial arts glow green?
oh yeah
my main inspiration is Iron Fist from Marvel comics
I've pretty much finished the cover of the work-in-progress comic, "A Polaroid Video of Folding Space"
I feel comfortable posting this because it doesn't actually spoil anything. Thoughts?
Thoughts are BRAIN PILLS.
I don't mean that in a bad way.
>CMM
The WIPs looked really good to me. You should just go at it and then try to feel happy that you did it.
I don't mean to post the same image again but after getting some feedback, I've made lots of renditions to the cover.
This is probably the actual final version. I hope. Maybe.
It almost looks like a ransomed note.
Need more coc characters in their undies
>why
cause I said so
Charlie Brown's Easter was right. Christmas advertising is year round now.
I didn't know shirt garters existed until I wore them for uniform inspections.
Would you like me to draw Hammerbug in her undies? Or regular Jack? Or a new foe for Jack?
all of them
Is that today?
Why is she black in this one?
Tanned from being in the sun.
I don't think most people tan like that.
Even an Irish-Asian mix can tan if they don't fear skin cancer.
this is a really long one
>Trouble in the Timelines III
>Marmot-man Woke-up in another timeline Feeling dizzy and Woozy
>Marmot-man:"oh Lord my head! aghh let's just hope that this is the right timeline, the Lunarian told me that they sent me to a futuristic timeline so let's go looking for this Timeline's Joe Filbert"
>he started walking and looking around, and he noticed that there were a lot of new devices and phones
>he was impressed at first but then saw how uncivilized and rude everyone was with each other
>he was both sad and infuriated with how things were in this timeline
> As he continued walking through the city, he heard the scream of a woman in a nearby neighborhood which activated his sense of helping and heroism
>Marmot-man Rushed to the Nearby Neighborhood and soon realized that it was a poor neighborhood by the look of broken windows and filthy houses
>he reached the source of the scream and found a woman crying on the floor while holding her son who was bleeding heavily from his leg
>Marmot-man:"What the matter ma'am? what happened to this young man?!"
> The mother(heavily crying):"My baby was shot by those....filthy Gang of bad people!!"
>Marmot-man:"....I will handle it, ma'am, i promise!,now let's help your son"
>Marmot-man started giving first aid to the injured young man and stopped the blood
>Young man(panting):"Please don't help us, we don't have the money to pay you
>Marmot-man(confused):"Pay me?! you don't need to pay me"
> Young man:"What? aren't you a superhero?"
>Marmot-man nods
> The Mother:"And you are not going to ask us for payment for helping us?"
>Marmot-man:"Why would i do that? I help people because I can not because of money ma'am so please don't insult me again by saying this"
>Marmot-man soon learned that in this timeline people pay superheroes for protection and help people which made poor neighborhoods unable to pay for protection and no herp bothered to help them
>he asked about the gang and they told him about The Fat Boy gang and their leader Big Daddy Lou he thanked them and they did the same
>Marmot-man continued his journey through the rest of the poor Neighborhood and found some gang members they approached him
>Gang member 1:"Hey big guy, this is a privet area, Turn around or ELSE!"
>Marmot-man ignored them and continued walking toward their headquarters
>Gang Member 2:"Hey man we told you to frick off,so frick off or we will frick you up"
>he said and then went to Marmot-man and started threatening him with a bat and knife
>Marmot-man(Smirking):"Well since Willow isn't here nor the others, let's have some old-fashioned FUN!"
> After a few minutes one of the gang members ran to Their leader with fear in his eyes
>Gang member 3:"BOSS!BOSS!"
>Big Daddy Lou was relaxing on his couch turned to him and asked why is he like this
> Gang member 3(panting):"Boss there's...there's a superhero guy who's coming here to..."
>Big Daddy Lou:"A superhero? in this area? that is weird,oh well i'm sure he's just some random 'tough guy who's trying to prove himself, just go with the others and kill him or something"
> Gang member 3:"That's the problem Boss...he.....he ahh"
>Big Daddy Lou:"WHAT? HE WHAT?"
>Gang Member 3:"Well Boss he literally 'planted' every member in our yard"
>Big Daddy Lou:"Planted? what the frick are you talking about?"
>Big Daddy Lou went with the gang member outside and found all of his gang members' heads buried in the ground and found Marmot-man waiting for him smiling
>Marmot-man:" You must be Big Daddy Lou! Nice to meet you.."
>Big Daddy Lou(pissed):"Who the hell are you?!"
>Marmot-man:"Just a man doing what is right"
>Big Daddy Lou:"Why? do you want to rule this area? we can have an alliance, someone as strong as you can be the kingpin of this"
>Marmot-man(with impassive tone):"You are truly a nasty human, A careless man who could wind up dead and wear his sins like it's some kind of prize i came here to stop your tyranny over those poor people"
>Big Daddy Lou(laughing):"Oh you are truly an old-fashioned hero aren't you? but you see 'hero' you are the only one with powers!"
>Big Daddy Lou's body started to transform into a stone golem
>Big Daddy Lou:"Hehe I'm gonna show you how i ruled this area!"
>he started sprinting towards Marmot-man as the rest neighborhood people came to watch this brawl
>Marmot-man closes his eyes and starts focusing his breath and movement sensing Big Daddy Lou moves
>his right arm starts glowing green and a huge green burst starts forming on his hand
>he smoothly dodges Big Daddy Lou's stone body and then strikes him with a strong green uppercut punch to the head.
>Marmot-man:"i call this 'Hibernation Punch' haha"
>Big Daddy Lou fell unconscious and the neighborhood people started screaming in happiness but then realized that they didn't know Marmot-man's intentions
>Marmot-man(announcing):"FOR NOW ON NO ONE WILL EVER HURT YOU! I, MARMOT-MAN SHALL NOT ALLOW ANY HARM ON ANY INCONNET PEOPLE WITHOUT ANY REWARDS, YOU KNOW WHY? BECAUSE THIS IS WHAT A HERO DOES!!"
>Marmot-man thanked them and went on his journey to look for this timeline's Joe Filbert
>Meanwhile in the Filberts' house, Willow was cooking her famous waffles and then heard her sister Kayla Calling her
>Frost-Vixen: "SIS! SIS! you need to see this!"
>Willow came to the living room and asked why Kayla called her
>Frost-vixen:"Look Sis, isn't that our technique?!"
>Willow looked at the TV and saw the footage of Marmot-man using NMA and noticed the glowing Green hand
>Mighty-Beaver(thinking to herself in shock):"IS THAT DAD?!"
Kind of dick move promising protection when he's going to be pulled back to his own timeline in a few hours.
It's funny how you mentioned this part because this is exactly my intention when writing it (not him being dick or anything just being too determined and ready to help that he forgot that he's not from that timeline) and in the next greentext he will realize that he went full hero speech without a second thought kek
I wonder how his daughters will spin that so that his image isn't besmirched to the alternate future people.
Maybe say it was a ghost?
you actually gave me an idea
thanks anon
An echo from the past.
I know it's WAY too early to think about Halloween, but I wonder if any of the /coc/ characters have fricked about in a haunted house before - like the classic 'dared to spend the night' bit. Haunted houses and ghosts are a bit of a cliche, but they're a fun one because they put a lot of characters outside their element.
Could even do a spin on the idea where someone finds a haunted derelict spaceship with a mysterious distress signal or something, like the Blangs thinking they're going to rob a sitting duck and getting the shit spooked out of them. Shit like that.
Marley did in the Halloween comic.
Deelette and her friends did in a story from some years back.
Haunted ships are always fun.
Can't believe is around the corner. I need to start drawing spooky stuff for next month.hgpamt
I think I already inadvertently made a spook themed story for the season since it starred Blue Blood.
>but I wonder if any of the /coc/ characters have fricked about in a haunted house before
Yes.
Oh yeah, I have that comic saved too.
Shit, with the shimmie dead and gone there's really nowhere online to find that now, is there?
Merhaps
I update board tans whenever I can in between jobs and schoolwork
I do like drawing her terrified
Well I'm going to sleep.
precious.
your art has been getting better.
Nice seeing these guys again. This reference to an anime?
the kabocha wine episode 5
With character work, Jeremy just being a bit of a tense guy, a bit introvert and a wreck works out, gonna put in a sort of anti heroic vibes for the character, build up with his behavior being enough for good interactions, somewhat, and he has a good intellect, doesn’t play about unless he happens to at least take the joy for the hell of it.
Anyway here is what I got for a beginning story piece
>flashback with him and his mother
or
>instant introduction with a side view of him and crossing through the winter storm
Or something else, thoughts? Im 139521071, just to clarify.
Goodnight everyone.
bump
cute
can i get feedback on masterfully define piece that will bring hundred thousand traffic/klout/likes
like noticably some artist on social media do, and it's not a forced thing so i d like to understand how does the theory and aesthetic works against the value so i guess that my posts are making sales idk
Bump
bump
Bump for the ones not with us today
>Trouble in the Timelines IV
>Willow, anxious about the appearance of this mysterious "People's Hero," found herself in a state of turmoil. She couldn't shake the thought that it might somehow be her father, Joe Filbert, known in her timeline as Marmot-man. Meanwhile, Frost-Vixen, Kayla, pondered the possibilities.
>Mighty-Beaver (to herself):"What if someone cloned him just to taunt us? But what if it's really Dad? No, Willow, he passed away years ago. You must come to terms with this."
>Kayla, oblivious to the truth, shared her own thoughts.
>Frost-Vixen:"Hey, Sis, do you think this guy was a student of your father, or maybe he's his secret son?"
>Willow, a mix of emotions churning inside her, corrected her sister.
>Mighty-Beaver: "No, first of all, it's 'our' dad, Kayla. And second, Dad didn't have another child."
>Mighty-Beaver (to herself):"I think he didn't, right?"
>On the other side of the timeline, Marmot-man grappled with his sudden fame as the "People's Hero."
>Marmot-man: "Oh darn it! I shouldn't have gone full heroism with them. But I guess I can't stop being a hero, can I?"
>His thoughts were interrupted by the sound of The Lunar-Ian calling through his phone.
>Marmot-man:"The Lunar-Ian!! Hi!"
>However, the transmission was weak and garbled, making it difficult to understand.
>The Lunar-Ian (Ian):'M-.....Marmot.....-man.........Listen.......we....Ha-....-d...a problem......long...-story...short....we gotta need more hours........to bring.....you here....so try to....survive for............like......a day....or so!!"
>The sound abruptly disconnected before Marmot-man could respond, leaving him anxious about his daughter Willow and Liz in his original timeline.
>Marmot-man continued his journey, arriving at the forest where he had found Baby Willow years ago.
>Marmot-man (proud):"Oh, TrunkTown, you are majestic in every timeline!"
>Suddenly, he felt the presence of people nearby.
>Mighty-Beaver: "Now, Kayla, be ready. We have to be cautious."
>Frost-Vixen:*"Right, let's surprise this 'People's Hero' and find out who he really is."
>Willow and Kayla leaped forward, launching an attack from behind with impressive speed. However, Marmot-man effortlessly dodged their attacks, showcasing his agility and skills.
>Mighty-Beaver:"What?! He's fast!"
> Marmot-man soon recognized that these attackers were none other than his daughter and her sister.
>Marmot-man:"Stop!"
>Willow skidded to a halt, her eyes widening in disbelief as she saw the man standing before her.
>Mighty-Beaver:(whispering to herself) "No way... It can't be."
>Marmot-man, realizing the shock in Willow's eyes, decided to put her uncertainty to rest and took of his mask revealing his face.
>Marmot-man: (gentle) "Willow, it's me. you Father I'm not a clone, not a secrete twin"
>Willow hesitated, her voice shaking as she spoke.
>Mighty-Beaver: (stammering) "I... I need to be sure. Tell me something only you and I would know."
>Marmot-man thought for a moment before sharing a cherished memory.
>Marmot-man:(softly) "You used to chew on wood when you were stressed, and you once asked me when you were seven if we could visit Santa in the North Pole."
>Willow's eyes welled up with tears, and she stood there, speechless.
>Mighty-Beaver:*(emotionally overwhelmed) "Dad... It's really you but HOW?!"
>Marmot-man smiled warmly, relief washing over him, and told her that he would explain later. He then asked about Kayla.
>Marmot-man:** (curious) "And who's this?"
>Frost-Vixen:(grinning) "I'm Kayla, but you can call me Frost-Vixen. I'm your other daughter, Joe."
>Marmot-man was shocked and overjoyed to learn that he had another daughter from Liz.
>The reunion of father and daughters was a heartwarming moment, filled with joy and tears. It was a reminder that even in the most turbulent timelines, family bonds could transcend all challenges.
I wonder if he'll have his second daughter in his original timeline because he found out he had her in this other timeline.
Probably kek
It's a John meets Warhawk situation now.
kinda
but after this mini-arc Joe will be determined to be with his family and change his sealed fate (sacrificing himself and dying)
It's the Founding Titan
That design predates that by several years.
>Troubles in Timelines V
>Willow invited Marmot-man into their house, where he was welcomed by the familiar surroundings that had remained unchanged.
>Kayla, still somewhat skeptical, decided to question the visitor.
>Frost-Vixen:"So you are Sis's father?"
>Mighty-Beaver:"And yours too, Kayla. So be nice!"
>Marmot-man chuckled and nodded, understanding their curiosity. He decided to clarify the situation for them.
>Marmot-man:"Not exactly. Yes, I am Joe Filbert, but I'm from this timeline. In my timeline, Willow is a teenager the same age as Kayla here, and not... a muscular woman like this Willow. And you, Kayla, you're not born yet, my dear."
>Willow couldn't hide her disappointment, her expression turning slightly downcast.
>Mighty-Beaver: "Oh..."
>Marmot-man noticed Willow's reaction and tried to lift her spirits.
>Marmot-man:"But that doesn't mean I'm not proud of both of you. I mean, look at you, Willow. You've become a strong woman, and I'm delighted to see my little beaver girl all grown up. And Kayla, you have your mother's face and my eye colors. You remind me of both my young self and young Liz."
>Willow blushed at her father's words, and Kayla couldn't help but smile.
>With a more serious tone, Marmot-man began to ask about the state of this world and the whereabouts of Liz.
>Marmot-man: "Now tell me, what happened in this world? Where am I? Where's Liz? And why is everyone surprised to see a hero helping people for free?"
>Willow began explaining the grim situation they had faced.
>Mighty-Beaver:"Well... Dad passed away many years ago from an alien virus that he contracted when he went to help clean up the aftermath of an asteroid collision. That was before Kayla was born. Liz was by your side until the very end. After Kayla was born, she inherited Arctic Fox powers, and we trained with the Cult of Mother Canine, led by Wonder-Wolf and, of course, Liz, the Huntress-Coyote. Then... an Interdimensional Warmonger arrived, and the Great Realms Battle took place. Many heroes were lost... including Liz. After that, heroes stopped caring about helping people and protecting them. This led to the rise of neo-heroism, where you need to pay heroes to protect you. It's been terrible."
>Marmot-man was left in shock after hearing this overwhelming information. It was a lot to take in, but it all made sense now.
>Marmot-man decided to console his daughters.
>Marmot-man: "I'm so sorry, girls. I wish I could have been here for you, even if it's not my original timeline. I promise I'll do my best to help you now."
>Then he turned his attention to what had brought him here.
>Marmot-man: "Willow, did I ever teach you about NMA, Nature's Martial Arts?"
>Willow nodded, remembering the lessons from her late father, Green Guardian.
>Mighty-Beaver:"Yes, Dad. You taught me the basics. I've improved it by using the glowing green aura as a tool to jump higher and kick harder."
>Intrigued, Marmot-man asked her to demonstrate.
>Marmot-man:"Show me, Willow. I want to see what you've learned."
>Willow nodded, and a determined look filled her eyes. She focused her energy, and a vibrant green aura enveloped her as she leaped into the air with incredible height and delivered a powerful, controlled kick. It was a remarkable display of her skills and the legacy of her father's teachings.
>Marmot-man watched with pride, knowing that even in this different timeline, the spirit of heroism and the legacy of the Filberts lived on.
Willow is become Johnny Cage.
i didn't understand this comment kek
Perhaps kek
also, furgays never stopped surprising me
needed some "artistic inspiration" for Adult Willow so searched for some muscular female beavers and I'm both impressed and weirded out
Johnny Cage is a character from Mortal Kombat, a movie star who discovers his bloodline lets him enhance his kung-fu stunts with green energy.
>Johnny Cage is a character from Mortal Kombat, a movie star
I know this part
>who discovers his bloodline lets him enhance his kung-fu stunts with green energy.
didn't know this part (not a big mortal Kombat fan) but it's a weird coincidence kek
I've long since stopped being surprised by them. It's like hearing about whatever stupid shit Florida Man got up to this time.
I wonder how much of that future knowledge will be applicable to his own timeline.
The preview makes the lower part of his cloak look like... uh, something else.
I don't see it.
Maybe it's just because I was phoneposting at the moment.
>what's the matter, anon?
>could it be you're... craving my guitar?
Though the guy was twerking for a moment.
>The kid. Is a semi-mute. Tends to be refraining from people here and there when doing his usual, yet makes contact in a minor manner with vocals, gesturing, and expressions; a shy/socially “off” for a person. May have issues with social “sayings”, though can at least understand social sayings if it isn’t complicated for him. Though nonsocial, can make up for with semi-determination and his awareness of things. He at least is finding the full puzzle of realizing compassion and other positives to be better. Sees and has reasonable and/or logical abilities to things, though there may be flaws here and there. Capable of doing right, though with some issues, seeable or not. May be on the spectrum.
I feel as though this and among the other stuff, especially my project page isn’t exactly working out well, it doesn’t feel made fully?
You have a very odd writing style, that's for sure. Attempting to summarize:
>Character is a mostly nonverbal introvert and possible autist. Logically oriented but trying to be more compassionate.
Accurate?
I'm sure of it, but I think there's not alot of...character for him from what you're getting at.
Can't seem to find a style for me. Any help on this then?
>I'm sure of it, but I think there's not alot of...character for him from what you're getting at.
Talk about his friends, interests, job, powers. Personality alone won't make a compelling character.
>Can't seem to find a style for me. Any help on this then?
I dunno, do you read? Trying to ape the style of a writer you like is an angle. Comic scripts are available here and there if that's more what you're looking for.
Yeah but does this personaility sound good? Is there a way I should explain it akin to claire's creator's documents of the characters?
What i can do for explaination is i'm making him a bit of a loner, as it goes,but idk for interests. As a job he's focused upon being a basically a kid hero, but rather more of a Kid Merc Hero. I think i would go for a bit of a symbiotic, or ergokinesis like his brother.
I have a hard time understanding this stuff right now as i'm mentally distressed, lol. Also, writers have a style when pitching/outlining? I gotta probably figure this out first with you all before I get into comic scripts.
I'm unfamiliar with "Claire" or her creator but if that uses a format that appeals to you, that might be a good place to start, a good template to pull from. With so little to go on currently it's hard to say one way or another how the personality sounds. I think in general mute characters are uncommon, so there's a niche to be had there if it can be well executed.
Like I've said before, don't stress over it. Sit back and let it come naturally,, don't try to force it.
Is the anon who recommended Lustless fight a tentacle monster here? This is the beast, I will detail its tentacles now.
Hey, nice, it's Lustless anon. I was wondering where you were at. Looks like you've gone up a tier of art detail since you were last in here!
greetings friend, my life went fricking bonkers circa last december and I'm only now returning to normalcy. I am still commited to finishing lustless, but there will be obvious gaps in skill as I improve from page to page now. I made some /ic/ friends who have seriously helped me improve but every now and then someone reminds me I draw like a child.
Lustless will be an excellent memoir of your journey to artistic competence. You've already made more strides in the last year than I have over the past decade.
youre too kind~ page should be done in next few days wew
>"Let's cut straight to the point!"
Photoshop is struggling with this page. File is becoming too large.
>becoming too large
A common problem for Audrey.
How much more polish does the page need?
not much. I think I can start sticking bubbles in now.
Cool. Hope PS won't get crushed under the size.
And goodnight everyone.
>Troubles in Timelines V
>Marmot-man, after witnessing Willow's impressive demonstration of her newfound abilities, was eager to see what his other daughter, Kayla, had learned. However, when he observed her, he noticed that she still struggled with containing the glowing green aura. Her movements were unsteady, and she couldn't use it effectively yet. Furthermore, her speed was far from what it could be.
>Concerned for his daughter, Joe approached Kayla with a reassuring smile.
>Marmot-man:"Kayla, it's alright. Learning these abilities takes time and practice. Would you like some help in mastering the green aura and improving your speed?"
>Kayla looked up at her father, grateful for his support.
>Frost-Vixen:"Yes, Father, I'd love some guidance. I want to be faster and better."
>Marmot-man nodded and began explaining a new technique to her.
>Marmot-man:"Alright, Kayla, this is a trick I've developed over the years. It's a mix of your Arctic fox powers and the glowing green aura from NMA. Since you're lighter in your feral form, we can use that to our advantage."
>He gestured for her to follow his lead as he used NMA to enhance his leg muscles and bones making him a little bit faster. Kayla did the same, morphing into her Arctic fox shape.
>Marmot-man:"In your feral form, you're light and agile. But you'll need to focus on mixing your powers and aura to stay afloat. Imagine your green aura extending down and pushing against the air beneath you."
>Kayla concentrated, trying to mimic her father's instructions. She felt the green aura surrounding her as she attempted to push against the air. At first, it didn't seem to work, and she struggled to stay airborne.
>Marmot-man:"It's alright, Kayla. It takes time to get the hang of it. Keep trying."
>She persisted, gradually getting the hang of the technique. Soon, she felt herself rising slightly above the ground, hovering in the air. A sense of accomplishment washed over her.
>Frost-Vixen:"I did it, Father! I'm floating!"
>Marmot-man nodded in approval.
>Marmot-man:"That's it, Kayla. Now, let's work on your speed. Focus on channeling that energy to propel yourself forward."
>Kayla began to experiment, using the combination of her abilities to move faster in her feral form. She was a blur of green and white as she raced around the training area.
>Marmot-man:"Excellent, Kayla! You're getting the hang of it. Keep practicing, and soon you'll be even faster."
>Kayla grinned, exhilarated by her newfound speed and ability to hover. With her father's guidance, she knew she would continue to improve.
>As the day went on, Marmot-man spent quality time with his daughters, imparting his wisdom and teaching them valuable techniques. Together, they began to rebuild the legacy of heroism in this timeline, one step at a time.
Is the trick something he thought of while observing her mother?
was going to explain this later but sure why not
when Joe 'created' NMA he went to observe nature and wildlife to learn from it
He saw feathers and leaves dancing in the wind, inspiring him to find a way to walk in the air, but couldn't cause of his weight. (an athletic 6'3 guy so..) so when he saw Kayla's little fox body and remembered how arctic foxes jump high in the sky he wanted to try it
so he was more inspired by the wild,but as for his own move (the one where he used NMA aura to enhance his leg muscles and bones), and was inspired by Liza and how she uses her own leg muscles to jump higher
I take it that NMA must be imparted willingly and can't be learned from just observation of Joe.
You're correct; NMA (Nature's Martial Arts) is a unique and personal discipline that Joe, also known as Marmot-man, developed and honed over the years. While he can certainly demonstrate its principles and techniques to others, true mastery of NMA typically requires a deep understanding and connection with nature, a strong sense of inner peace, and often, a personal bond or connection with the practitioner's own abilities.
Observation can provide valuable insights and a foundation, but to truly excel in NMA, individuals often need to embrace its principles on a personal level, making it a part of their own philosophy and lifestyle.
i smell toast
top bugge
Is his purpose to replace the brain in a skull or to suck the brain out of a skull?
Complete mind control by latching on to the strongest most powerful being he can find by inserting his proboscis into them since he's pity, weak and pathetic all by himself so he's an easy bullying target by others. Not like it's complety undeserved from him trying to pray on others
Jean wants him to find his own self worth, strenght and respect rather than latching upon others to get strenght since it's not his own and can easily be taken away. But he's way too desperate and power hungry to fully reason with and usually goes back to his old ways
I know this is probably a concept for a superhero that a lot of people already imagined, but what about a woman superhero, that in her private life is the perfect wife for her husband and in her secret life is a super-hero that fights the crime?
I guess this is basically super moms
At least one of the Super Moms, yeah.
Sometimes I don't think it's about creating something with a unique spin, but in how you present it and then deliver it.
Yeah, sounds like Supermoms. It's a cute concept though. Everybody loves Susan Storm and post-52 Mera.
Not only our Supermoms, but the one from the Coke commercials, too: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SNUBIx-OqkM
Though like
said, execution is what's really important.
The problem with this idea is women would never do this and you need a really good reason that drives her
>Troubles In TimeLines VII
>later that night, Marmot-man went back to the house with his two daughters Willow and Kayla.
>Kayla was tired from the intense training, so she went to bed after she wished her sister and her father from another timeline a good night.
>Marmot-man: "Wow, it seems that Kayla is tired. She didn't even eat her dinner."
>Mighty-beaver: "Yep, she never trained that hard before, haha. It seems that she really wanted to impress you, Dad, and make you proud."
>Marmot-man (smiling): "Well, I'm already am."
>After that, Willow made dinner for the both of them, and she sat down to eat with Joe. They started eating in silence. Joe decided to break the silence and asked her another question.
>Marmot-man: "So did we start a superhero team in this timeline? The Dynamo League with Implad, Captain Under-Socks, and Dr. Invisi-Bling?"
>Willow shook her head and then answered him.
>Mighty-beaver: "Well, yes, we had a superhero team, but it was more of a family team with you and me and Liz. We tried to include more heroes, but no one was really interested in our 'Hippie'-like lifestyle, so we kept it familial."
>Marmot-man chuckled a little and zoned out as he remembered how in his timeline he started the Dynamo League with just two members who were him and eight-year-old Willow but then met the other members and became like a big family.
>Mighty-Beaver: "So, Dad, can I ask you something?"
>Marmot-man: "Sure, kiddo."
>Mighty-Beaver: "Why did you choose this costume and name?"
>Marmot-man (smirking and playfully answering): "What's wrong with marmots? They are cute, with their little hands and tails."
>Mighty-Beaver: "Well, hehe, it doesn't look threatening or heroic..."
>Marmot-man was smiling even wider and chuckled a little.
>Mighty-Beaver: "What's the matter?"
>Marmot-Man: "Well, you see, my sweet Willow... You were the reason I chose this name and the marmot theme. When you were eight years old and just fresh into heroism, you were embarrassed by your name and appearance. I told you, 'It doesn't matter what your name is and what is your theme because if you are a good hero, you will gain respect no matter what you call yourself.' I chose to be Marmot-man to cheer you up, to show you that you can gain respect with a silly animal theme like that. And I did, eventually. Haha... Great heroes and even gang leaders say my name with respect because of my actions and diplomatic ways to end conflicts."
>Willow smiled a little after hearing this.
>Marmot-man: "What was my hero name in this timeline?"
>Mighty-Beaver: "Green Guardian..."
>Marmot-man: "Interesting! Not bad. I would've gone with it in my timeline, but I'm happy with Marmot-man. Haha."
>After that, they started talking about what happened with Big Daddy Lou and Joe becoming the people's hero.
>Marmot-man: "I didn't think it through, and now I'm stuck with being the people's hero even though I won't be here for so long."
>Mighty-Beaver: "You truly did an incredible job, Dad! Like the internet is now buzzing with people talking about you and even inspired by you... Did you hear that? You literally inspired new heroes! You have been here for less than a day, and you did what I couldn't do in years... This is why I think..."
>Marmot-man: "Mhm?"
>Mighty-Beaver: "Well, I think you should stay here with us... We can be a family again! We can go fight crime and abolish neo-heroism and bring traditional heroism back."
>Marmot-man listened to Willow's heartfelt plea, his expression reflecting a mix of sadness and longing. He gently placed a hand on her shoulder and spoke softly
>Marmot-man:"Willow, I wish I could stay here with you and be the hero you want me to be, but I have responsibilities in my timeline. There's a young Willow who needs her father to guide her, and the Dynamo League needs its leader."
>As he spoke, Marmot-man could see the disappointment in Willow's eyes, and it tugged at his heart. He continued
>Marmot-man:"But that doesn't mean you can't continue the fight for traditional heroism here. You've already shown incredible potential, and I couldn't be prouder of the hero you've become. You have your sister, Kayla, to train and guide, and together, you can make a real difference."
>Willow nodded, her eyes misty with emotion. Marmot-man pulled her into a warm, tight hug, just like he used to when she was a little girl. He could feel her tears against his costume, but he knew that this was a moment of closure and reassurance.
>He began to softly sing "Sweet Little Bumble Bee," a song that had always brought comfort and joy to Willow during her childhood. The familiar melody wrapped around them, a reminder of their special bond and the love they shared.
>After the song ended, Marmot-man lifted Willow gently into his arms, carrying her to her room like he used to when she was a child. He tucked her into bed, planting a soft kiss on her forehead.
> Marmot-man(he whispered):"Everything will be alright, Willow,"
>Marmot-man:"You have what it takes to carry on the legacy of heroism and make this world a better place. I'm so proud of you and Kayla. Take care of each other, and never stop believing in the power of heroism."
>With that, Marmot-man left Willow's room and settled on the couch, his thoughts filled with the complexities of time and duty. As he looked out the window at the night sky, he knew that the timelines held many mysteries, but one thing remained constant—the enduring spirit of heroism that would continue to inspire and protect.
He's much stronger than he seems if he lifted his adult muscular daughter and carried her to bed as if she were still a child.
i was going to add a small comment from him about this
like "well Willow you are a lot heavier than I remembered haha" but didn't want to ruin the moment
also yes Joe is stronk kek
Two beavers are better than one.
Unprompted piece of Crackdown lore: for the good of everyone involved, some people REALLY shouldn't make babies with each other.
That's closer to real life lore than anything else
That's kind of the point: Arthur's life up to the point when he became Crackdown sucked, but it's supposed to suck in a believable, almost mundane way.
There's a difference between "growing up without a parent" who died in a dramatic accident and who was there physically, but never "there", you know?
Boop!
Pumb
i might add one or two Dynamo league greentexts for this week
but for the time being
any questions?
any suggestions?or ideas you want to see?
any complaints?
Just as a possible idea…
>Dynamo League vs the reluctant villain
>a terrifying shadow monster is attacking the city, completely immortal except for the human being projecting it into reality. But as the league closes in on this shadow using villain, they realize that they may not have full control over their monsterous powers
hmm, so you are saying a villain who's a real threat to them?
>Snap back to Willow so we see how she's doing during the day her father disappeared.
maybe I will
two beavers? if you mean Kayla then no she's a human with Arcatic fox shapeshifting powers so she has a normal human appearance
I already thought of something like this just wait
Snap back to Willow so we see how she's doing during the day her father disappeared.
I don't think he'll want it back by then.
how about we see an alternate Evil version of Joe or Willow?
like a version that uses NMA to cause harm and use it for villainy
Was there any mention in what city the Coalition's headquarters are located?
Sundial City, home of their central base, the Lighthouse.
da progress. Im gonna do small panels of her getting grabbed
Reminds me of those aliens from The Simpsons.
Super cool!
Super cute really.
>Troubles In TimeLines IIX
>In the next morning, Willow woke up early to get ready for a new day as the Mighty-beaver. She was used to preparing her breakfast and Kayla's breakfast, so when she found the table was already prepared and their breakfasts were served, she was pleasantly surprised.
>Marmot-man: "You still love your eggs scrambled, right?"
>Mighty-Beaver: "Oh, Dad, I totally forgot about you, hehe. Yes, I still do."
>Marmot-man: "How about Kayla? How does she usually eat her eggs?"
>Mighty-Beaver: "Ehh, I'm not sure if she likes eggs..."
>Frost-Vixen (shouting from her room): "Scrambled, please!"
>Marmot-man smirked at Willow while raising an eyebrow. After that, they all sat down and started eating their breakfast. Kayla was loving every bite she took.
>Frost-Vixen: "Ohhh, this is amazing!"
>Marmot-man: "Glad you liked it!"
>Mighty-Beaver: "So, this is your last day here? Hope you got what you wanted."
>Marmot-man: "I actually did. I never tried using NMA to increase my jumps. Also, I'm impressed by how you two were able to improve in such a short time."
>Mighty-Beaver: "Thanks, Dad!... Oh yeah, since you are here, I want to ask you something."
>Joe sipped some coffee and listened attentively.
>Mighty-Beaver: "What's and who's 'the equalizer of all'?"
>Joe's expression changed from smiling and enjoying the food to anger and terror.
>Marmot-Man: "WHO TOLD YOU ABOUT THIS?! YOU SHOULD NOT READ ABOUT THIS, WILLOW!"
>Willow and Kayla froze in their chairs. Joe took a deep breath and then calmly said:
>Marmot-man: "Sorry for shouting. I didn't mean to scare both of you. But please don't try to look into this thing again... It's... It's not worth it."
>Mighty-Beaver slowly nodded, realizing that this was something her father didn't want her to delve into any further. They continued eating in silence while Joe was deep in thought.
>Meanwhile, in his own timeline and in the Lunar-Ian lab, Lunar-Ian was stuck in the ceiling, hiding from Liza after she heard what happened.
>Wonder-Coyote: "Come on, nerdy boy, come here and fix your mistake!"
>Lunar-Ian (Ian): "Not until you promise that you will not hurt me."
>Josephine entered the lab and found her sister terrorizing her coworker.
>Wonder-Coyote: "Sister Wolf, my greetings!"
>Lunar-Ian (Ian): "Huntress! Help me take your crazy sister out of here so I can continue my work."
>Huntress-Wolf: "What happened here? Why is Sister Coyote here? Where's Joe?"
>Wonder-Coyote: "In another timeline because this genius sent him there."
>Lunar-Ian (Ian & Lunar): "It's Mr. Genius to you!"
>Wonder-Coyote: "And how are you going to explain this to Willow?"
>Lunar-Ian (Lunar): "Who?"
>Wonder-Coyote & Huntress-Wolf: "His daughter!"
>Willow was training in Huntress-Wolf's room, trying to use NMA again. She concentrated her energy on her arm, trying to summon the green aura.
>She-beaver: "Come on! Come on!"
>She tried her best but failed, so she threw herself on the bed and started thinking.
>She-Beaver: "Am I ever gonna be as strong as Liz or Huntress or even Dad? That alien Zorio told me that I will be a strong hero and a member of the Supreme Justice Legion! Oh my god, imagine being a member here and having my own room! I will bring Dad with me... and even Liz, I guess... What if my dad marries her? Do I have to call her Mom? And what if they have children... Oh my god, the idea of a little brother or sister that I can teach and take care of is cool! But what if my dad will love the new child more than me... No, no, I don't think Dad would love any person like he loves me... right?"
>Willow, in her teenage years, was navigating the complexities of being a hero and, more importantly, a daughter who missed her father. Her thoughts were filled with dreams, worries, and a longing for a stronger connection with her dad and her family.
>What's and who's 'the equalizer of all
Always another secret forbidden technique.
pumb
Slow today, huh
It's Friday. Usually the thread would be gone about now.
Weird.
Logically you'd expect the opposite to be the case.
In a more perfect world the thread would hit bump limit by Wednesday and then not be present on Cinemaphile for a few days to further discourage the notion of it being a general. Then we'd use plusCinemaphile's /coc/ board during that time to post any of the relevant conversations or new characters for future discussion here.